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MOONSHINE - a 100 word story

THIS WEEK'S 100 WORD STORY came to me while I was shopping, so I wrote it sitting in my car in the car park, which is very appropriate under the circumstances.
TO MY SURPRISE when I got home and typed it up, it came to exactly 100 words, so I decided to post the first draft - un-edited. 
Thanks to Rochelle for the photo prompt on her blog;  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
You can read other writers' stories by following the blue frog trail on her blog.


MOONSHINE
It started as a joke.
Frank, Hank and Billy-Joe were sprawled on the veranda of their mouldy cabin in the woods drinking moonshine.
    “This stuff tastes like horse-piss,” Frank said and Hank said, “More like jet-fuel,” and Billy-Joe said, “Reckon it’d make even our old bangers fly.”
     Frank ‘borrowed’ the company’s muck-shifter that weekend and built a ramp out in the desert, while Hank tinkered with engines and Billy-Joe spread the word and took bets.
     The entire town turned out to watch as the cars sped up the ramp and flew, all too briefly, before nose-diving into the unforgiving sand.
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53 comments:

  1. brudberg01/07/2015, 13:46

    Ha.. what a great use of moonshine. Good they never drank it.. stuff like that makes you go blind.

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 18:00

      It was drinking it that made them stupid enough to do it!

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  2. RobCrompton01/07/2015, 14:13

    That pic is a bit like the automotive equivalent of the head-down-the-loo after effects of too much booze!

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 18:00

      That sound as if you speak from experience, Rob?

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    2. RobCrompton03/07/2015, 12:46

      How on earth could you think such a thing! :)

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    3. liz young03/07/2015, 16:13

      By our age, dear Robert, if you haven't talked to God on the Big White Telephone a few times you've lived a very tame life!

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  3. Anonymous01/07/2015, 14:26

    Must be one hell of a ramp.
    Good piece.

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 18:00

      Big industrial machines can move mountains.

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  4. Susan Kane01/07/2015, 17:26

    Perfect capture of dumb guys. Grew up in an area filled with guys like this, back hills of moonshine stills. Pic is excellent.

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 18:01

      I know an old Irishman who still buys his poteen in a back street.

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  5. Sandra Crook01/07/2015, 17:55

    But it would have been fun while it lasted... I guess.

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 18:02

      What - the flight? Probably, though I doubt they bothered to wear saftey gear.

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  6. Susan A Eames01/07/2015, 17:56

    Love your story, Lizy! And what a great photo prompt!

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 18:03

      Thanks Susan - and yes, Rochelle does pick some humdingers!

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  7. Anonymous01/07/2015, 19:01

    Stupid follows where stupid leads. Fun take on the prompt.. stumbled a bit on "bangers" and "muck-shifter" Not common terms here, though moonshine and stupid we have in abundance.

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 20:48

      /bangers are old cars that have suffered a few bangs in their time and on which the exhaust 'bangs' frequently. A muck-shifter is a machine that shifts muck!

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  8. Dale01/07/2015, 20:06

    Oh this is so good! I can see it all taking place! Great job!

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    1. liz young01/07/2015, 20:48

      Thaks Dale - there are such idiots in every country, I believe.

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  9. Vinay Leo R.02/07/2015, 02:11

    Wonder if they won the bets and made something :) And if they lived to enjoy their winnings.

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    1. liz young02/07/2015, 10:02

      They probably lived - stupid drunks tend to bounce!

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  10. Anonymous02/07/2015, 07:14

    I skipped college classes to spend a day and spent a day with my Dad. We created our own college chemistry class by Jerry-rigging a moonshine still. The class took ALL DAY, ha. ... but what a day. That was the best class every taken.

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    1. liz young02/07/2015, 10:03

      Where does your dad live and does he have any to spare?

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  11. Keith's ramblings02/07/2015, 09:14

    I fancy a go at that! Moonshine please!

    Visit Keith's Ramblings!

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  12. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields02/07/2015, 10:07

    Dear Lizy,

    I love it when a story comes quickly. I guess moonshine will only take a car so far. Fun story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. liz young02/07/2015, 13:46

      Thanks Rochelle - it makes a change for me to post my story on a Wednesday!

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  13. Rosey Pinkerton02/07/2015, 17:31

    That's the kind of thing I'd do by accident! I hate driving up ramps!
    Rosey Pinkerton's blog

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    1. liz young02/07/2015, 22:23

      Never drive up a ramp if you can't see where it's going to end up!

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  14. Russell02/07/2015, 21:06

    Congratulations of the fast inspiration. I've had a few come that fast, but only after drinking moonshine, which by the way, can be very tasty or burn like liquid fire. It does bring on a daredevil demeanor, making one feel 12 feet tall and bullet-proof.

    My only critique--I've never heard of a mouldy, backwoods cabin with a veranda. A front or back porch would be more common terminology for these characters.

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    1. liz young02/07/2015, 22:26

      Thanks Russell - I'll remember your advice in furure. Not being a backwoodsman, or even American, I had to wing it and got it wrong!
      ps - our own chilli vodka beats even poteen for sheer cross-eyed whoomph, but I;ve never tried moonshine.

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  15. Yolanda Renée02/07/2015, 23:43

    Moonshine could make a person do some very odd things, this looks like it turned into artistic fun! Good job!

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  16. Dawn03/07/2015, 04:35

    As old as I am I just drank moonshine for the first time last year. It was peach and although not "good" it wasn't bad ;)

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    1. liz young03/07/2015, 09:29

      You look young to me, Dawn, and I didn't drink poteen till I was 60!

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  17. Sally03/07/2015, 11:31

    I enjoyed reading this. That moonshine has a lot to answer for.

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    1. liz young03/07/2015, 12:21

      Hi Sally - I wonder what their wives thought of this exploit?

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  18. Gah Learner03/07/2015, 18:27

    Hehe. People who know what they're doing, can make great moonshine. Me, I'm all theory... Great story, what a fun read.

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    1. liz young03/07/2015, 21:23

      Thanks Ga H - I believe you can make moonshine from practically anything - after all, poteen is made rom potatoes!

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  19. Perry Block03/07/2015, 18:48

    Wish they had drunk it, I would love to have seen the picture prompt! Write more stories in the car, nice take ...

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  20. Rosalind Adam04/07/2015, 10:47

    Sounds like they were still well tanked up themselves! Haha!

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  21. Anonymous05/07/2015, 19:39

    Well written, and on the first draft, as you say. :)

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  22. liz young06/07/2015, 10:45

    Thanks for visiting and commenting, liberta

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  23. Annalisa Crawford06/07/2015, 21:29

    Weeeeee-thump!

    Just in case you were wondering what your story would sound like :-)

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    1. Annalisa Crawford06/07/2015, 21:30

      Brilliant first draft, by the way!

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    2. liz young06/07/2015, 22:37

      You think a thump rather than a crash? You could be right - depending on the consistency of the sand! And thanks.

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    3. Annalisa Crawford07/07/2015, 13:19

      Yep, definitely a thump... or possibly a thwump (the added 'w' makes a big difference.)

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    4. liz young07/07/2015, 15:22

      Yes - I like the W. :)

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  24. Unknown07/07/2015, 08:41

    At least they had the sense to use the company car and they got the bet money. Don't like the driver's chances though. Good first draft.

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    1. liz young07/07/2015, 15:23

      Company car, Irene? No, they only borrowed the muck-shifter - the cars were their own!

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  25. margirene07/07/2015, 12:30

    Bangers and smash?? Lots of fun here - I loved it.

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    1. liz young07/07/2015, 15:24

      And that's what I should have called my story! Brilliant!

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