AFTER THE STORM
Once the storm had passed, Lewis surveyed the wreckage. The
whole thing lay in ruins, irretrievably broken.
He picked up a chair, remembering how the two of them used to
sit happily watching the sunset, a bottle between them.
That was the cause of tonight’s trouble – after they’d
finished one bottle he’d asked her for another, and she’d accused him of
treating her like a waitress. She shouldn’t have spoken to him so
disrespectfully.
He fetched the bottle for himself and sat down to drink,
watching the calm waters of the bay, which gave no clue to what lay beneath
them.
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This is utterly, utterly brilliant, Liz!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Titiana!
DeleteA storm that lead to an extreme reaction it seems.
ReplyDeleteHe did go over the top somewhat :)
DeleteLovely double meaning of the storm.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ian X
DeleteWelcone back Liz with this lovely little chiller
ReplyDeleteThank you, Anon!
DeleteThat last anonymous comment was from me
ReplyDeleteThanks Neil. I'm trying to work out how to comment as me automatically - Blogspot have changed me to Anonymous so I have to change it every time - so frustrating!
DeleteThere is a certain type of man for whom respect is tremendously important, and you give us a good picture of such a man in your story.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Penny
ReplyDeleteSeems so petty. But it's often the little things that kill a relationship.
ReplyDeleteExactly so!
DeleteYou set a cozy scene, and then--SMASHED it in just a few words. Really good!
ReplyDeleteThank you
ReplyDeleteoh oh ... I think I don't like him ... (Well done!)
ReplyDeleteYou're not supposed to like him, so I've done my job!
DeleteGlad you are back, Liz. Interesting story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bill.
DeleteWelcome back to FF, Liz! Good to read you again.
ReplyDeleteAlcohol is the "x factor" in any situation, and this time it was a negative. I don't know what's coming under the surface, but it could be devastating.
Alcohol is never the answer, but often the cause of trouble.
DeleteOooo dark twist. Nicely written. There's a lot more going on with him if that was what set him off and she paid the price.
ReplyDeleteHe overreacted in spades. Thanks for commenting.
DeleteIt is to easy to say the wrong thing. May peace return.
ReplyDeleteI think it's too late, as she's at the bottom of the sea!
DeleteDear Liz,
ReplyDeleteWelcome back. We've kept your space open for you. Hmmm. On your story. Bodies have a way of washing up onto the shore. And now he has to get his own beer. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle - and yes, he'll probably meet his just desserts. [deserts?]
ReplyDeleteOops, I had started feeling sorry for him before you turned it around completely. Welcome back too and I am sorry for your loss.
ReplyDeleteWelcome back, Liz.
ReplyDeleteStory with a surprise end.
At first, we feel that he's such a caring husband, who's missing his wife...