24/05/2019

BLINDFOLD - a story in a hundred words


BLINDFOLD

Nobody wanted to play Cousin Gary’s stupid game, but as we hadn’t seen him for years we let him persuade us.
I should have stopped it when he held Susie a second too long while guiding her hand to pin the tail on the donkey, but I told myself not to be paranoid.
Then it was my turn. Blindfolded, I heard scuffling and a smothered gasp, but even then I didn’t guess, and finished my go before I removed Gary’s woollen scarf.
The expression on Susie’s face will haunt me to the grave.
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I am late on parade this week, due mostly to the lovely weather which has taken me out into the garden instead of sitting at my computer. Having inherited a neglected garden last summer, there is a lot to do. Protecting my spinach from the depradations of pigeons was this week's prioiry!


28 comments:

  1. That was really chilling, Liz! Well done.

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  2. Well done. Damn the Cousin Garys of the world

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  3. Oh, you can't leave us hanging like that! Well, yes, I guess you can :) Really well told.

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    1. Thank you Linda - one has to leave a lot to the Reader's imagination in flash stories!

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  4. A horrible scenario, and a hard scene to imagine how everyone reacted next. Well written Lizy.

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    1. Thank you iain - I ducked out of writing the next scene!

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  5. Very dark. Sounds like one of those things that goes on for years, no-one knowing or telling.

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  6. Oh, I think Susie's mum put a stop to Cousin Gary's little games.

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  7. Cousin Gary needs to be welded into a cell.

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  8. Hopefully before long he'll get what he deserves. A chilling tale indeed.

    My story - 'A stab in the dark'

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  9. Gary needs to be taught that no means no! Good take on the prompt, Liz!

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  10. Oh, that is creepy. Well done!

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  11. Dear Liz,

    There are too many cousin Garys out there. Disturbing story. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks rochelle. I realised when writing it that i have used the theme before, so i must try to be more varied!

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  12. Well written and disturbing tale. The look on Susie's face is a great and powerful ending

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  13. I'm wondering where the adults were. Gary needs to be watched. He's starting young. Poor Susie. I hope she told her mother. A good story, Liz. Well written. ---- Suzanne

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    1. Thanks Suzanne. I imagined Gary as an adult, and as he'd been absent for some time the other adults were unaware of his proclivities.

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  14. Sickening... those cousins should be kept away

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    1. From now on they will be, preferably behind bars.

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