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TROLLEY DOLLIES - flash fiction

TROLLEY DOLLIES

“Will you look at her, Mavis! Stuck up cow.”
“Thinks she’s too good for us because Waitrose carries a better class of shopping.”
Betty sniffed. “She still gets dumped in the same car park, though.”
Mavis leaned in confidentially. “Those trolleys with the posh wheels are always getting nicked. I heard her cousin’s living on the streets full of a bag-lady’s stuff.”
“No!” Betty was briefly diverted, but then a chilly wind blew and she creaked dolefully. “She’ll be as rusty as us soon if this flood water doesn’t go down – my wheels are bloody freezing!”

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Janet Webb took this photo which is this week's prompt for Friday Fictioneers, the group hosted by Rochelle. Follow the link on her blog  
 https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/  to read other 100 word stories.



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22 comments:

  1. goodeyedeers28/07/2016, 09:47

    I enjoyed this. Your words brought the picture to life.

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    1. liz young28/07/2016, 10:57

      Thank you Michael - the dialogue just popped itno my head instantly!

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  2. Helen Baggott 28/07/2016, 09:49

    Humorous and poignant!

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  3. RobCrompton28/07/2016, 11:01

    Good one, Liz!

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  4. Gah Learner28/07/2016, 11:10

    I love this. Gossips will be the same, made from flesh or from wire. Great humour.

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    1. liz young28/07/2016, 11:34

      Thanks Ga H - you can hear their voices, can't you?

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  5. Sandra Crook28/07/2016, 16:57

    Those Waitrose trolleys - there's no talking to them some days. Nice take.

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    1. liz young28/07/2016, 22:18

      They've heard they're from the shop known as the Middle Class's Harrods!

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  6. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields29/07/2016, 11:46

    Imaginative story, Liz. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. plaridel30/07/2016, 20:05

    if we dare to listen closely, we can really hear them talking. :)

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    1. liz young30/07/2016, 22:18

      You yoo, plaridel? We're both slightly mad!

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  8. Dawn01/08/2016, 03:25

    Haha..love the dialogue

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  9. Susan A Eames01/08/2016, 15:52

    Spiteful, gossipy trolleys? Hilarious and different - well done, Lizy!

    Susan at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. liz young01/08/2016, 22:06

      I just reported the conversation as I heard it!

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  10. margirene02/08/2016, 08:46

    You'd think their shared predicament would make them draw together - I guess not. Funny story, Liz, with a touch of sadness because their voices and spitefulness sound so human.

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    1. liz young02/08/2016, 17:10

      I saw them wearing pinnies and rollers!

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  11. P.S. Joshi03/08/2016, 10:37

    Humorous story, Liz. Interesting point of view and voice. If they could think and talk, I imagine shopping carts would sound just like that. Good writing. :D --- Suzanne

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  12. liz young03/08/2016, 13:48

    Thanks Suzanne x

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