I almost used it again this week, as I had a cataract operation two days ago and my eyes are a bit strange, but instead you have more about Juan, whose story I wrote last week. It's neither sequel nor prequel - is there such a thing as an interquel?
ASTRAY
“Take it
to policia,” Juan’s mother would have said, but he’d left home to escape her
discipline – he sold the bracelet he found in the street. Later, broke and
hungry, he stole a handbag, and soon he was a regular at the backstreet
pawnshop.
Juan
lived the high life until he fell ill – his woman took his wallet and left. Starving,
his fevered hands botched the next robbery, and under the uncompromising regime
of jail he yearned for his mother’s gentler discipline.
A sheepish tale!
ReplyDeleteEwe are ram on target!
DeleteGroan (at those comments)! I enjoyed the story though - and I like your new word: interquel - but think it would look better hyphenated. Ah, writers... :)
ReplyDeleteBut sequel and prequel aren't hyphenated. Maybe inquel would be better? Writing about juan again was a copout anyway!
DeleteIt's not inquest at least (though in this case I guess it could have been)
DeleteGood one, Bjorn!
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ReplyDeleteMums do sometimes know best.
ReplyDeleteBut often it takes a crisis to realise it.
DeleteWell at least he learned his lesson - hopefully for good :)
ReplyDeleteHis mother and his wife will make sure of that!
DeleteTrusting mum's judgement doesn't seem to be the worst choice for him, since he can't trust his own. Nothing wrong with raising sheep.
ReplyDeleteNothing wrong at all, as long as you don't choose an escapologist breed!
DeleteOuch.. Yes if you rebel too much you have to go back with the tail between his legs... I can almost guess what kind of wife he got.
ReplyDeleteHopefully the kind of wife he deserved!
DeleteHard lesson learned.
ReplyDeleteI think he'll be content now to stay put.
DeleteI think Juan will finally rest easy with the sheep. It's a great ending to your tale, Liz.
ReplyDeleteThanks Amy - Juan should have no trouble falling asleep, at least!
DeleteDear Liz,
ReplyDeleteI think Juan will be happier in the long run.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Of course he will - happy ever after.
DeleteGeez, that is almost sad.
ReplyDeleteYou think so? I think he's fianlly fallen on his feet!
DeletePoor Juan. He could have saved himself from so much misery - but at least he'll have some good stories to tell his grandchildren. Or perhaps not. Terrific story - you packed so much into your hundred words.
ReplyDeleteThanks Margirene - Juan will be fine until his own children start being naughty!
DeleteGood for Juan. He finally learned his mother's advice was right. Good writing, Liz. :) --- Suzanne
ReplyDeleteNow, if only my sons would listen to me ...
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