EDRUN THE
IMMORTAL
Edrun’s subjects loved him. His courtiers walked backwards
before him, servants fought over scraps from his plate, and his retiring-room
slave had amassed a sizeable sum by selling the contents of the Royal commode.
When Edrun ordered a statue, saying he desired to be
remembered, there was consternation.
“Sire! You will live forever!” they cried, but he felt the
growth spreading.
Edrun died a year after the statue’s unveiling and within a
month his son had it removed.
Now moss grows on the statue and only pigeons see this
reminder of Edrun’s reign – and of his mortality.
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You can find more 100 words stories on the Friday Fiction site run by Rochelle;
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
The way of the world, and the way of fledgling princes I suspect. Nice one.
ReplyDeletePoor Edrun - he should have brought his son up to show a bit more respect!
DeleteThe king is dead...
ReplyDeleteI think Edrunson wants to forget that he, too, is not immortal!
Deleteonly pigeons see this reminder of Edrun’s reign Sad. Hopefully his son's subjects will love him as well.
ReplyDeleteI don't thnk the son deserves to b e loved like his father was!
DeleteDear Liz,
ReplyDeleteI suppose the pigeon poop is a fitting memorial of one who's reign was excremental. Clever story. Although I don't think I'd care to buy the contents of the commode, no matter how royal.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Not even if they had curative powers? That was in my mind but I couldn't fit it into the 100 words!
DeleteLizy, I think the program swallowed my 1st comment again. What I said was something like: Good and well-written story. The king probably had a grandson who saw what his father did and learned from it. The king's son will probably suffer the same fate. As they say, "What goes around comes around." : ) ---Susan
ReplyDeleteHi susan - again! I don't understand what happens to you comments or my replies to them. It is a mystery that I think will have to be solved from your end because noone else has reported this to me!
DeleteThank you for persisting and for you kind words.
"...his retiring-room slave had amassed a sizeable sum by selling the contents of the Royal commode." A great line! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Perry - I liked it too!
DeleteThat's the nature of royal lineage - no time to mourn, just moving on to the next in line. The same fate will be waiting for the son, who I fear will not be so beloved.
ReplyDeleteNo, he won't - though he might have been if he'd shown more respect for his father.
DeleteDad sounds a hard act to follow.
ReplyDeleteAhah! Do I detect a note of sympathy for Edrunson?
DeleteHas not one of his descendants heard of a Karcher Pressure Washer?
ReplyDeleteWassat when it's at home, Helen?
DeleteAh, it's a great device for shooting high-powered water at dirty things... or at lazy husbands.
DeleteNB, Please do not try the latter at home - that was most irresponsible of me!
Ooh!! Where can I get one? Would it deter the yappy little rats on the balcony above us? My foam tube water pistol doesn't do the trick for long.
DeleteHasn't any of his descendants heard of a Karcher Pressure washer?
ReplyDeleteI'm sure there's some of Princess Diana's poop on display in a museum somewhere. She'll live forever.
ReplyDeleteEEUW! Really?
DeleteOh my God, what a terrible son! Great story though, Lizy :)
ReplyDelete-Tinkerbelle96
Some sons can be like that unfortunately!
DeleteI'm sure the pigeons are forever grateful for their royal commode. He is still the king in their eyes. Good story!
ReplyDeleteTheir king - or just their throne?
DeleteDear Lizy, Excellent story! People did sell every despicable piece of gross left overs and made good profit. Funny what people will stoop to sell for money. Me - too creepy to think of. Oh well, to each his own! Nan :)
ReplyDeleteDear Nan - it took me a moment to realise that you were talking about the retiring room slave! Thanks for stopping by again!
DeleteAmazing post and blog dear!
ReplyDeleteXOXO!
Gracias! Pero quien es?
DeleteReally sad..
ReplyDeleteNice narrative!
Thank you.
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