10/08/2016

ISLAND PICNIC - a 100 word story

ISLAND PICNIC

When Tom was young his parents used to take him over the reed-bed to picnic in the summer-house.
“Walk quietly,” his father would warn, “Don’t wake the troll,” and Tom would tiptoe across in delighted terror.
Later, Tom played the troll game with his own children, and even his worldly-wise grandchildren trod softly over the bridge.

One afternoon, at an island picnic, Tom collapsed. His sons raced homewards carrying him, their footsteps loud on the bridge, and they were halfway across when a massive arm reached up and snatched the body.

 “It’s what Tom would have wanted,” they said at his coffin-less wake.

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Firstly I am proud to tell you that I have had a poem accepted for World Poetry Day, which you can read under the 'Melting Pot' tab on Liz Brownlee's blog at:  https://messagepoemstotheplanet.wordpress.com/
Secondly I would like to say 'Welcome' to another two followers who have appeared out of the blue - thank you for your interest in my blog!
And thirdly, this week's photo was taken by Adam Ickes. I remember the photo, so presumably I have written a story about it before, but I can't remember when or what, so here's a new one! The prompt was posted for Friday Fictioneers on Rochelle's blog  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/  To read other stories, follow the Blue Frog trail from there.

29 comments:

  1. Great story, Lizy. Nicely constructed with an ending I didn't expect. Could just see that arm weaving up and snatching old Tom away. Really good

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    1. Thanks Lynn - glad I managed to draw you a picture!

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  2. Dear Liz,

    Delightful story. I didn't see that end coming. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Love the ending and congratulations on the poem.

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  4. Perfect way to end it. Loved it!

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    1. Glad you liked my story, Adam, thank you.

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  5. That mental image was overpowering. Well done.

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    1. I just hope he was dead before the troll took him!

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  6. What a great troll story.
    Goes to show you that even in death someone may be trolling for you.
    Randy

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    1. Thanks - I hadn't thought of it that way!

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  7. Wonderful, every bit of it. And congrats on the poem. :)

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    1. Thank you Ga, I'm glad you enjoyed my Grimm fairy tale!

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  8. i guess the trolls were ready to have some fun! just wondering what it took them long. :)

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    1. They only wake up if you make a lot of noise - surely you know that?

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  9. Well, I wasn't expecting that! Great little yarn.

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  10. A much gentler, but still hungry, Troll than mine Liz. A great story.

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    1. Thanks Michael - I'm sure even trolls have different character traits.

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  11. So it seems the troll was real indeed and that Tom was wise!

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    1. Let's hope Tom's end WAS 'what he would have wanted'.

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  12. You’ve made me laugh out loud and feel guilty for it.

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    1. Cheers, Dawn! A laugh is okay :)

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  13. Good story, Liz. That was a great twist at the end. Congratulations on having your poem accepted for World Poetry Day! :) --- Suzanne

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    1. Thanks Suzanne - I hope you went to the poetry site and read some of them?

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