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THREE DAYS - a 100 word story

 

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THREE  DAYS

It was three days before I dared to move. Three days sweating in the heat, three nights trying to sleep in a space not built for bodies, even one as small as mine, three days without food or drink.

 The first kick scared the hell out of me, metallic echoes ringing in my ears, but when no-one came I kicked harder, over and over, until I was free.

 I burst out into blinding sunlight – my first in God-knows-how-long – stepped over his stinking body and raided the fridge.

 Now I must find out where I live – I want my mum.

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This is my 700th blog post!! Actually I'm surprised it's not more - certainly I feel like I've been blogging for ever and a day - but the stats on my page can't be gainsaid.

Thanks as ever to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers on her blog, which has been going for WAY longer than mine - I wonder what her score is? Also thanks to Rowena Curtin for the photo prompt. To read other interpretations of the image, go to  https://rochellewisoff.com/  and follow the Frog link.

PLEASE DON'T FORGET to leave a comment, and maybe also to check out my LIVING ROCK books on Amazon - a link to ROCK FESTIVAL, the fourth and final book in the series is at the top of this page.


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38 comments:

  1. Neil MacDonald30/09/2020, 16:35

    Grizzly, Liz, and mysterious

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  2. Rowena30/09/2020, 17:45

    Liz, when I saw this clothing bin which lives at the back of a carport in an industrial estate and out of the way, I could see a young child hiding in there, but your version is also unfortunately all too plausible.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. liz young30/09/2020, 22:21

      I didn't know it was a clothing bin, I just saw an outside lockable store! Thanks for commenting.

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  3. Susan A Eames30/09/2020, 19:12

    That was chilling - but good that she escaped. This could be turned into a much longer story!


    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. liz young30/09/2020, 22:22

      So could so many pieces of flash fiction 🙂

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  4. Iain Kelly30/09/2020, 20:01

    So many questions - why were they in the box? Why couldn't they leave earlier? Who was the body? Great mystery Liz

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    1. liz young30/09/2020, 22:23

      I saw a kidnapped child, and a kidnapped who died, leaving her trapped.

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields30/09/2020, 20:13

    Dear Liz,

    What a way to spend three days. I could feel the panic and despair. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. liz young30/09/2020, 22:24

      She was fortunate it was only three days. If she hadn't been able to kick the door open...

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  6. JadeLi01/10/2020, 05:17

    Your story really makes me want to know more. How she got there and what happens next. There is a feeling reading like when I read parts of The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo.

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  7. Anonymous01/10/2020, 07:14

    This story could have ended nasty. Poor child. So many unanswered questions - well done.

    -Tannille

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    1. liz young01/10/2020, 08:33

      Thank you, let's hope she finds her way home.

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  8. Sandra Crook01/10/2020, 10:52

    Very vivid take on the photo, Liz.

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  9. Keith's Ramblings01/10/2020, 15:20

    Poor kid, thank goodness she broke free. Seems her captor got what he deserved.

    Here's mine!

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  10. Linda01/10/2020, 16:25

    Oh, my! Was not expecting that dead body, but am so relieved the child escaped that awful prison. Really good writing, Liz.

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  11. plaridel01/10/2020, 19:43

    what a lucky break for her. not everyone was that fortunate.

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  12. Bill02/10/2020, 07:46

    And there it is. Well told.

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  13. Subroto02/10/2020, 11:16

    Chilling story with plenty of mystery. Congratulations on your 700th blog post.

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  14. Brenda Cox03/10/2020, 04:50

    A terrifying tale for the poor little girl. I cheered when she kicked the door open and was free. I hope she gets back to her mum. Well written, Liz.

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    1. liz young03/10/2020, 09:42

      I think she will get home, she's determined enough.

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  15. Penny Gadd03/10/2020, 17:16

    That could be the start of a longer piece - you've left yourself plenty of mysteries to unravel! Your last sentence, "I want my Mum," is an absolute gem.

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    1. liz young03/10/2020, 18:02

      Thanks Penny - I really should go through my flash fiction and see what could be expanded!

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  16. brudberg04/10/2020, 19:49

    I wonder if the body is his abusive father...

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    1. liz young04/10/2020, 22:59

      Could be, though I imagined the child had been kidnapped.

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  17. Nobbinmaug04/10/2020, 21:34

    What a horrific experience well described. Once she's out of that box, I think the worst is over.

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    1. liz young04/10/2020, 23:00

      Yes, she just has to find her way home.

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  18. Susan Kane04/10/2020, 23:58

    Well done. You left us waiting! well written.

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  19. Na'ama Yehuda07/10/2020, 01:33

    Wow. Poor kiddo. Sad thing is, these things happen for real. And we often don't get to hear about it. Well done!

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  20. Laurie07/10/2020, 07:49

    Creepy and dark. A great escape. Hope she finds home and safety soon. Well done

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