BY THE PRICKING OF
MY THUMBS
It was so hot in the campervan that the children
wanted to sleep in the tent. Delia was reluctant to let them but Barclay said, “The
security guard patrols regularly – they’ll be fine.”
“I’ve got a bad feeling...” Delia demurred, but when he
winked and added, “We’ll be alone for a night,” she blushed and yielded. The site
was well-lit, the pool’s surface reflecting the orange lamps – what could go wrong?
Eventually the children’s giggling ceased, the van
rocked to a standstill, and all was silent. Only then did a tentacle slither up
from the deep end.
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This story, prompted by C.E Ayr's photograph, is my first for this year, and written in a hurry, as it is my granddaughter's 5th birthday today and I am taking the cake. I have been making Smartie cakes since my own children were small - sometimes chocolate ones, but she prefers plain. So be it!
And here is an update for those who read my story two weeks ago. My mother enjoyed her impromptu stay in a nursing home so much that she wanted to stay. Fortunately they had a vacancy arise over the Christmas period, so we will be moving Mum in soon.
Dear Liz,
ReplyDeleteWhat a sweet tradition. As for your story...uh oh. It was all fun until the tentacle appeared. Happy New Year.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle x
DeleteI'm thinking that tentacle shouldn't have been in the pool
ReplyDeleteSlipped in under cover of darkness?
DeleteWhat a climax!
ReplyDeleteThanks Helen.
DeleteIt's guys like that who give tentacles a bad name.
ReplyDeleteIs that known as speciesism?
DeleteEek! Was not expecting that ending! Good one.
ReplyDeleteGlad it worked, thanks Iain.
DeleteI was expecting something bad, but not tentacles.
ReplyDeleteThe title warns you to expect something nasty!
DeleteAT least they got to finish before being horribly killed :-)
ReplyDeleteThe parents might have survived only to wake to the nightmare of missing children.
DeleteA tentacular terror tale! Nasty but nice Liz.
ReplyDeleteThanks Keith, happy new year!
Deletegreat story. one of the best this week. :)
ReplyDeleteSweet of you to say so!
DeleteExcellent story, Liz. I knew something bad would happen - as you say, the title says so - but tentacles and unguarded kids? How could you? ;-)
ReplyDeleteMwaah- ha-haah 😖
DeleteEek. There I was chuckling about the rocking campervan, and then tentacles... Maybe the children shriek loud enough that an action-packed rescue is possible?
ReplyDeleteWrite your own ending, Gah!
DeleteI had a creepy feeling when Delia had a bad feeling, but I wasn't expecting tentacles. Well-done, Liz!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Brenda!
DeleteSo happy for your Mum!
ReplyDeleteLovely traditional cake...
And um... tentacle? No thanks...
Thanks times three, Dale!
DeleteAnd that's exactly how it would happen! Good story, Liz!
ReplyDeleteANd their parents will never know where they went! Thanks Jade.
DeleteThe boogieman in the water. Great start to a horror story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Tannille.
DeleteSounds like the parents have already started on replacement kids!
ReplyDeleteI hadn't thought of that!
DeleteNothing good comes from a dark tentacle
ReplyDeleteExcept for the owner of the tentacle!
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