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4.10.18

SHELL GAME - a story in a hundred words


SHELL GAME

Dave was out there as usual this morning in his car, waiting to follow me.
I did my normal Tuesday shop then met the girls for coffee, and while the babies played we went over the plan meticulously – we would only get one chance.

After an hour Sally left wearing my clothes, with her shopping in my buggy, Rene tucked my baby in with hers and walked off to the Mall, while I jogged across the park, my face hidden in Sally’s hoodie.

That evening we celebrated in the Refuge – Dave is no match for three women playing the shell game.
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Here we are again, another week, another raft of stories courtesy of Rochelle at   https://rochellewisoff.com/  who manages our group of writers, and thanks to Sandra Crook who took the photograph.
For any reader who doesn't understand my reference, the shell game is a sleight of hand trick played with three conical shells and a pea, similar to Find the Lady.
Local Author Fair - and if anyone is in Crawley on Saturday 13th OCtober, come and visit my stall at the Library (opposite Debenhams) where I shall be giving away more of my flash fiction.

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39 comments:

  1. Helen Baggott04/10/2018, 15:24

    What an interesting interpretation, Lizy.

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    1. liz young04/10/2018, 16:07

      Thanks Helen - I think! And you're always first to comment :)

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  2. Iain Kelly04/10/2018, 16:30

    Now this prompts a lot of questions! Why is Dave tailing her? Seems he is right that she is up to something, but where is she off to? Great stuff.

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    1. liz young04/10/2018, 17:20

      He's stalking her, which is why she has to get away to a women's refuge.

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  3. Neil MacDonald04/10/2018, 17:17

    Seeing a shell game in the prompt was great

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  4. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields04/10/2018, 21:36

    Dear Liz,

    We used the same title but our stories were very different. Clever women.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. liz young04/10/2018, 22:16

      I did wonder when I saw your title! But all was well 😁

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  5. Jacob Edwards04/10/2018, 22:03

    I wonder what Dave's face looked like when he found out he'd been duped haha. I enjoyed the pun in the title as well! Nice post!

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  6. Abhijit Ray05/10/2018, 04:19

    Outfoxed Dave, this time! What is the guarantee that he will not find you and follow you again?

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    1. liz young05/10/2018, 08:13

      In this life there are no guarantees, especially with predators like Dave.

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  7. EL Appleby05/10/2018, 16:02

    Well done for squeezing this game of subterfuge into 100 words. Nicely done, I really enjoyed this and am glad she's escaped Dave's clutches.

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    1. liz young05/10/2018, 16:40

      Thanks for commenting - glad you enjpyed it!

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  8. liz young05/10/2018, 16:40

    Thanks Stuart.

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  9. Dale05/10/2018, 17:03

    Brilliantly done, Liz.
    Now that's a shell game that is a worthy one!

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    1. liz young05/10/2018, 21:23

      Thanks Dale. Any game that outwits a stalker is a good one.

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  10. theministryofshrawleywalks05/10/2018, 17:52

    Well done ladies, Dave is no match at all, but to a refuge, he must be a very bad man

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    1. liz young05/10/2018, 21:24

      Hopefully the refuge is just the first step.

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  11. plaridel06/10/2018, 04:47

    that's women's power for you. men are smart, but women are smarter. :)

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    1. liz young06/10/2018, 08:23

      Precisely. Thanks for commenting, plaridel.

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  12. Anonymous06/10/2018, 09:27

    A lot of story in one hundred words. The women's supportive bond showed clearly, Jilly, Sugar on the Bee

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    1. liz young06/10/2018, 20:25

      Women should always be that supportive.

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  13. Linda06/10/2018, 19:11

    Intriguing, intricate planning. Dave must have been a really bad guy. And now he's a really frustrated bady guy :)

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  14. brudberg07/10/2018, 17:37

    Oh... I'm happy that they succeeded but at the end I feel sorrow that they had to.

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    1. liz young07/10/2018, 18:35

      Thanks Bjorn - you're right, they shouldn't have had to duck and dive to evade Dave.

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  15. Jo Hawk08/10/2018, 03:49

    Great reason to play the game. Hope he doesn't catch up to her.

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    1. liz young08/10/2018, 08:02

      As it's my story, I'll make sure he doesn't!

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  16. Alicia L. Jamtaas08/10/2018, 05:22

    Ah, I thought about the shell game but you did it up royally! Great take!

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  17. draliman08/10/2018, 07:53

    Ha, I can imagine Dave (who sounds a bit creepy) getting more and more confused :-)

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  18. Lynn Love08/10/2018, 11:58

    Wonderful use of the prompt, Liz. I hope the ruse works and that she's finally free of him. A clever tale

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  19. Sandra Crook08/10/2018, 16:36

    Nice to know there's fun to be had even in such a desperate situation. I must confess, I feared for the safe return of her friend, Sally.

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    1. liz young08/10/2018, 22:20

      Oh, I think Sally is a resourceful woman. Thanks for commenting, sandra.

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  20. Dawn09/10/2018, 00:36

    I don't think the seriousness of this "game" can be comprehended on a first read.
    I'm glad i read it again.

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