WAITING
‘Nine o’clock by the statue.’
His typical text – terse and lacking in
detail. He assumes too much, gives too little, yet I have been here since eight.
It is now nearly ten.
When the morning rush eased off I
felt too conspicuous in the thinning crowd and moved to the mezzanine. From
here the people look insignificant, and with a jolt of clarity I realise that
is how he sees me. Suddenly I am angry. As I leave the concourse the fresh air
clears my head.
At nine pm my phone buzzes. ‘Where
are you? I’m waiting.’
I delete his message.
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Yes! High-five that woman!
ReplyDeleteA woman after our own hearts!
DeleteServes him right
ReplyDeleteSo it does.
DeleteIt's good to get a little perspective. Now maybe he'll get a chance to see things from her point of view.
ReplyDeleteHe probably won't, and she's well rid of him.
DeleteWell... maybe there should have been better clarity as to AM or PM?? communication is a good thing!
ReplyDeleteHis fault - her gain.
DeleteQuite right too! He needs to learn to respect her a bit more.
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Travel, Fiction and Photos
She's not going to hive him the chance.
DeleteHa, after the ending I'm not sure who is more to blame for this relationship heading south! :-)
ReplyDeleteHopefully she'll choose better in future.
DeleteI love how she comes to realise that he doesn't see her as he should. Bravo to her.
ReplyDeleteBravo indeed!
DeleteExcellent story!
ReplyDeleteThanks Patsy.
DeleteBy 10pm he's history! Nice one
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Thanks Keith.
DeleteHmmm. A little misunderstanding, but a huge revelation in the way it played out. Good one.
ReplyDeleteHe did her a favour by giving her time to think clearly.
DeleteGood for her. A confusion over AM and PM has helped her to see the light.
ReplyDeleteNot before time!
DeleteI like the way you use the physical viewpoint from the gallery to emphasise the emotional distance that he keeps from her. He's kept her at arm's length - probably just likes a sense of control - bet he cheats on her too! She's well rid of him!
ReplyDeleteHe is! I love the way you write a detailed critique, picking up details I hadn't even considered! Thank you.
Deleteyay, it was about time... :)
ReplyDeleteWasn't it just!
DeleteThe person in this story is so right! They are better off without him! Nicely told.
ReplyDeleteAt least she saw sense before she got in any deeper.
DeleteDear Liz,
ReplyDeleteShe gets an "atta girl!" I love the jolt of clarity. Well done for the writer and the protagonist.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Not sure if my post stuck. Anyway, well done that girl. Bin him off. And a great description of her insignificance to him and her dawning realisation of it, Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.
ReplyDeleteIt stuck, Jilly, and thank you.
DeleteLove this. There's nothing like suddenly realizing you mean very little to someone to let you know you are very worthwhile. Beautifully done
ReplyDeleteSome people take longer than others to wake up. Thanks for commenting.
DeleteWonderful take. We never know when we get the strength. Good for her.
ReplyDeletehttps://trailbrooklane.blogspot.com/2018/06/the-statue.html
Thanks Jaya. I feel for her - it's difficult to be the one who makes the break.
DeleteSmart move. No one should feel insignificant in a relationship.
ReplyDeletePrecisely.
DeleteExactly... being taken for granted is one sure way it will never improve.
ReplyDeleteBeen there, burnt the tee shirt.
DeleteI love that moment of realisation as she looks out over the crowd - she's nothing to him and deserves better. That's a real kicker and so well done.
ReplyDeleteShe was fortunate to have that time to reflect.
DeleteI was having this conversation with my son yesterday about time being the most valuable thing we have. I find it very disrespectful when someone doesn't appreciate my time.
ReplyDeleteYou are so right - and it's even worse when they don't respect you either.
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