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ESCAPING - a story in 100 words


ESCAPING

I know it won’t be an easy road, but there’s no turning back now.

I loved him once, but he soon knocked that out of me. The kids, poor little sods, tiptoed round the place like mice, scared to say a word. I tried to hide the bruises but they guessed anyway.

With no money I couldn’t see any way out, but last night Mikey, my little hero, tried to stop him, and he hit Mikey. Knocked him clear across the kitchen.
So now we’re leaving, making our own way, and however rough it gets he’s not going to stop us.
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Bjorn Rudberg's photo, which Rochelle used on her blog  https://rochellewisoff.com/  this week, reminds me of some of the mountain roads in Tenerife - the ones the tourists don't see - where you can't turn round even if you want to. Those tracks prove that vehicles use it regularly despite the dangers - I wonder what's round the corner that could be worse than the road itself?
That thought prompted my story - what faces this mother is scary, but if she stays...



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38 comments:

  1. Iain Kelly21/03/2018, 23:10

    A shame it has gone this far before she left, but you're right, it leaves her no option but to take the new path. Nicely done Lizy.

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  2. plaridel22/03/2018, 02:46

    good for them. one can only take so much abuse.

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    1. liz young22/03/2018, 08:57

      Thanks plaridel, shame they left it that long.

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  3. draliman22/03/2018, 13:48

    A pity it got to the point of a kid getting hit, but at least in the long run it will be better for them.

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    1. liz young22/03/2018, 14:11

      She was so worn down by fear that it took an attack on her son to make her act.

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  4. Unknown22/03/2018, 16:06

    She shouldn't have waited till the tipping point. Hopefully there are better times ahead for her and her kids.

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    1. liz young22/03/2018, 22:27

      Unless we've been in that position we can't know how we would react.

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  5. Penny Gadd22/03/2018, 21:13

    I like the voice you've found for the mother, with its blend of weariness, fear and defiance. The structure is good too. Nice work, Liz

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  6. Patsy23/03/2018, 09:50

    Sometimes there are no easy options.

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    1. liz young23/03/2018, 14:03

      Their lives can only get better from now on.

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  7. Unknown23/03/2018, 11:09

    good use of the prompt picture Liz. At least she had a tipping point allowing her to make the decision to leave. Many women would leave the child at risk rather than go. Shows she has courage.

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    1. liz young23/03/2018, 14:04

      Many women have had the power to leave knocked out of them along with the love.

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  8. Keith's Ramblings23/03/2018, 11:37

    Things can only get better, no matter how difficult the route.

    Click to read my 100 Word Story!

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  9. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields23/03/2018, 12:12

    Dear Liz,

    It sounds like she should've left long ago. Glad she's finally wised up. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. liz young23/03/2018, 14:05

      Thanks Rochelle. Leaving is too difficult at times.

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  10. Anurag Bakhshi24/03/2018, 04:09

    Powerful and inspirational.

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  11. Dahlia24/03/2018, 10:52

    I'm so glad she finally took the call

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    1. liz young24/03/2018, 11:55

      Hopefully before the children had suffered too much damage.

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  12. Linda24/03/2018, 13:46

    Yes! Leave the jerk cold and lonely. Power lies in making hard choices.

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    1. liz young24/03/2018, 15:44

      Well said, Linda. We are on the same wavelength!

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  13. Alicia L. Jamtaas24/03/2018, 18:20

    I think this sort of thing happens more often than we know.

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  14. Dale24/03/2018, 22:36

    Her breaking point came a little later than it should, but the important thing is she has now done what must!
    Excellent job, Liz

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  15. lisarey1990@gmail.com25/03/2018, 05:22

    Great story about a very important topic. Great job.

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  16. brudberg25/03/2018, 18:19

    I have seen similar routes on Teneriffe, but usually when hiking. Love your way of using it as a metaphor for the road you take despite how rough it is.

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  17. liz young25/03/2018, 22:32

    Thanks Bjorn x

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  18. Lynn Love26/03/2018, 08:17

    So glad she's finally leaving, but like so many people in abusive relationships, it seems she was financially and emotionally trapped. Amazing how much you'll put up with yourself but if your child is hurt ... Vivid storytelling Liz

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    1. liz young26/03/2018, 10:26

      Thank you Lynn, for reading into my story all that I hoped people would.

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  19. Dawn27/03/2018, 14:13

    So sad that's what it took.
    A very real story, Liz.

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  20. Anonymous27/03/2018, 15:26

    So glad that she is leaving. Hope the days are brighter for her and the kids.
    Thanks Norma.

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    1. liz young27/03/2018, 15:52

      Thanks Norma - her days will be brighter, if only because she's left that darkness behind.

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