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STAIRCASE TO HEAVEN - Flash fiction

STAIRCASE TO HEAVEN

As the afternoon sun slid towards evening, the starburst of light rose up the tower wall enticingly.
“It’ll be an amazing view,” the twins urged, but neither parent fancied the climb after a day of sightseeing.
“You go – we’ll be in the cafė,” Phil said. They watched from below as the two silhouettes shrank, four childish hands playing catch with the quivering reflections. 
Other eyes watched from above.

“It looks like a staircase to Heaven,” Jane remarked before heading for tea and cake and a nice sit down.
But appearances can be deceptive – Hell isn’t always underground.
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Why this lovely photograph taken by Roger Bultot prompted me to write this story is a mystery even to me. Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers on her blog  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/  from whence you can follow the link to read how other wirters interpreted the photo.




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22 comments:

  1. brudberg22/09/2016, 15:10

    I love the mystery.. the stairway to heaven turning gateway to hell... my fantasy can only imagine what happened up there... but I think it's dark behind the stars.

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    1. liz young22/09/2016, 16:51

      Leaving the outcome to the reader's imagination is a new departure for me - glad it worked for you, Bjorn.

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  2. Anonymous22/09/2016, 19:27

    My imagination scared the hell out of me: every mothers nightmare.
    Great piece.
    Tracey @traceydelaplainmd.com

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    1. liz young23/09/2016, 09:17

      You are right to call it every mother's nightmare, Tracey.

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  3. Susan A Eames22/09/2016, 21:29

    Ooooh, Liz - well done on a brilliantly unexpected creepy tale!

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    1. liz young23/09/2016, 09:18

      It is a bit creepy, isn't it? A bit like insects, in a way!

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  4. Gah Learner23/09/2016, 11:53

    I'm not a mother, but am also freaked out. Once again this shows that what you don't say is a lot more horrifying than what you do say. Great writing, Liz.

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    1. liz young23/09/2016, 14:30

      Thanks for visiting and commenting, yet again, Ga.

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  5. Alicia23/09/2016, 19:30

    Wow! I love where you took this, creepy or not. Very well done.

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  6. Perry Block23/09/2016, 21:23

    Now that's intriguing! Nice departure.

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  7. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields23/09/2016, 23:08

    Dear Liz,

    I like the thought that hell isn't always underground. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. Alice Audrey24/09/2016, 19:03

    Finding the right distance for parenting is such a challenge. I tended to err on the restrictive side. I made my kids help me up the hill.

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  9. Anonymous25/09/2016, 16:44

    May be it is a fly over to the other place. Very neat.

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  10. Anne Higa26/09/2016, 00:09

    Creepy! I don't think it is going to end well for these twins.

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  11. Dawn27/09/2016, 03:06

    I’m scared. I’m not sure why but I am.

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