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TEA, NO SUGAR - a story in 100 words.

TEA, NO SUGAR

Steve was building a fence to stop old Mrs Williams sticking her nose in their business, and after a while Lisa brought him a mug of tea.
He gulped a mouthful, spluttered, “Stupid bitch - no sugar!” and swung his fist, forgetting the hammer until it was too late.

Steve acted on instinct. He drove into the forest and buried Lisa’s body deep, then went home and finished the fence.
He told Mrs Williams Lisa had run away but she suspected otherwise. So did the police.

Two months later the spores he’d carried home on his boots put him in jail.

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 This story was prompted by the image, which was posted for Friday Fictioneers by  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/  You can read dozens more stories by following the Blue Frog link on her blog.
My daughter-in-law would be able to tell whether these are edible or not - reading some of the other stories this week, nobody else seems certain!
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42 comments:

  1. Patsy05/03/2015, 17:48

    Yep - no sweetness there at all!

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  2. Linda D05/03/2015, 19:04

    Clever!

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  3. Dawn05/03/2015, 22:35

    Damn, what a temper!

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    1. liz young05/03/2015, 23:34

      Not the fist time he'd hit her, either!

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  4. Sandra Crook06/03/2015, 07:30

    The truth will out. Fortunately.

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    1. liz young06/03/2015, 10:15

      This time, fortunately. Thank goodness for nosy neighbours!

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields06/03/2015, 09:45

    Dear Liz,

    This reads too much like a news article. The jerk shouldn't have raised his hand to strike her in the first place. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields06/03/2015, 09:46

      I meant that it's close to real life. I've seen too many stories like this on the news. Not a thing wrong with your writing. ;)

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    2. liz young06/03/2015, 10:17

      Thanks Rochelle - I did get what you meant the first time but thanks too for following up!
      No, he shouldn't have raised his hand to her - it was obviously his first reaction every time. As you say - too many similar things happen in this world.

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  6. Douglas MacIlroy06/03/2015, 09:47

    Dear Lizzy,

    A great little crime and punishment vignette. A good lawyer would have said that spores are airborne up to seven miles, but hey, lawyers area expensive for that very reason.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. liz young06/03/2015, 10:19

      Well, of course, in 100 words I couldn't include the soil debris and insect life that Hodgins woulf have found in one of Bones' investigations. You'll have to take that as read!

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  7. Maggie May06/03/2015, 13:02

    A very satisfactory ending for a very nasty individual. Crime doesn't pay thank goodness.

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    1. liz young06/03/2015, 13:29

      This crime didn't, Maggie, but there are far too many violent men who do get away with it.

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  8. keiths ramblings06/03/2015, 14:20

    Serves him right! Nice one.

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  9. i b arora06/03/2015, 15:15

    how could you manage to tell so much in just hundred words,great

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    1. liz young06/03/2015, 16:37

      Thanks iba. It's easier than trying to write an 80,000+ word novel!

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  10. Anonymous06/03/2015, 23:08

    Yikes! He was a rotter. Glad he was found out.

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    1. liz young07/03/2015, 10:37

      He was horrible and deserved everything coming to him.

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  11. Anonymous06/03/2015, 23:58

    So much violence this week at Fictioneers. I think mushrooms bring out the dead. Bastard deserves to be feeding mushrooms himself. Tracey@whatsfordinnerdoc.com

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    1. liz young07/03/2015, 10:38

      You're right about the violence, yet I saw these as toadstools. Mushrooms I love!

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  12. Alicia07/03/2015, 01:15

    A real A-Ha! moment in that last line. No wonder he built the fence - he didn't want anyone to see how mean he was.

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    1. liz young07/03/2015, 10:40

      The fence didn't stop Mrs Williams from noticing, did it? A-ha! indeed.

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  13. Unknown07/03/2015, 10:55

    Torn on the moral ( nosy neighbors, not his getting caught ) but clearly in favor of the story, ;)
    Tay.

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    1. liz young07/03/2015, 17:03

      I think Mrs Williams was just a friendly bneighbour whose concerns about his violence were well justified.

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  14. janet07/03/2015, 22:55

    I'm amazed at the way these innocent little 'shrooms brought out the vicious and horrible in many FF's. :-) Glad he got caught!

    janet

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  15. Anonymous08/03/2015, 17:46

    Great crime story. I love a bit of forensics. Worth a longer version.
    MJLstories

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    1. liz young08/03/2015, 17:57

      Thank you - so many of my 100 word stories could be expanded that I am considering tackling that project next. I shall have to find different photos from my own albums!

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  16. brudberg08/03/2015, 20:20

    Oh .. somehow I feel this was not really an accident.. and I'm sure he was justly served..

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    1. liz young08/03/2015, 21:22

      A man who throws a blow for fogotten sugar deserves what he gets. His poor wife didn't.

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  17. Perry Block09/03/2015, 04:02

    Mushrooms to the rescue! I can see it now --- "Law and Order: Mushroom Division."

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  18. Anonymous09/03/2015, 14:49

    Oh, wow! I will have to remember not to forget the sugar next time I serve someone tea! :-)

    Lily

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    1. liz young10/03/2015, 10:05

      I hope your friends are more understanding!

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  19. Subroto09/03/2015, 15:08

    Bang band Maxwell's silver hammer....No wonder a spoon full of sugar is so highly rated. Nice one.

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    1. liz young10/03/2015, 10:06

      I doubt the hammer was silver but you've set that tune off in my head!

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  20. Susan Kane09/03/2015, 20:44

    Cold hearted murderer, done in by some mushrooms. Good CSI work there.

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    1. liz young10/03/2015, 10:07

      I love those forensic programmes, though I think in real life analases take a little longer than they do in 'Bones'!

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    2. liz young10/03/2015, 10:08

      I love those forensic programmes, though I think in real life analases take a little longer than they do in 'Bones'!

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