01/11/2018

WHEN I'M BIGGER - flash fiction for Friday Fictioneers


WHEN I’M BIGGER

Why does crying make your eyes all blurry?
I’m hungry, but when I asked Mummy for a biscuit she said I’d made her brush slip and she smacked me.

I don’t like it when she paints her models because it makes her busy and cross. She calls me a little pest and tells me to ask Daddy, but I don’t want to.

When I’m bigger I’m going to bite him – perhaps that will stop him hurting me.
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This week's photo prompt was taken by Jeff Arnold and it made me screw up my eyes trying to get it in focus, hence my story, which happened so fast that it only reached 80 words. I hope you agree that I was right to stop there? Please leave a comment and follow the link from Rochelle's blog  https://rochellewisoff.com/  to read other stories.

It doesn't seem possible that it's November already, but my son and grandson's Trick-or-Treat call last night made it clear. I shall have to get a move on with my decorating if our new old cottage is to look its best by Christmas!

Helter-Skelter - how about buying yourself an early Christmas present? My latest novel is on Amazon in paperback or Kindle, (click on the cover at the top of my blog to find it) and would make a great fireside read. Or a beach book, if you're in another temperate zone!

37 comments:

  1. Sounds like a miserable childhood caught between two uncaring and inforgiveable parents.

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    1. Sadly there's far too much of it around.

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  3. Poor ill-treated child. Nowhere to turn for a little kindness or attention.

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    1. I encountered some such children when I was working for a Housing Association.

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  4. Good one, Liz - dark, but a good one.

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  5. Sad but powerfully written story, Lizy. I think it was long enough to get the message across loud and clear.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thank you Susan - there seemed to be nothing I could add, so I didn't.

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  6. Aww, that's a sad little piece...

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  7. even a puppy doesn't deserve such cruelty. most definitely, these folks deserve what's coming to them.

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  8. Poor little kid. I hope she gets through it all okay.

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    1. She will, eventually. I know - it's my story!

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  9. She does not seem to like both her mother and father. Father appears more sinister. He hurts her. Is he a molester?

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  10. Heartbreaking voice in this thoughtfully told story, Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.

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  11. She's clearly not giving in to all that cruelty. Her time will come.

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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  12. Sounds like they have driven the poor child to contemplate revenge. Lets hope it doesn't come to that. Nice.

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  13. You definitely stopped just in time. No need to go further for this sad and dark tale of a most unhappy childhood. What horrid "parents" she has.

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    1. Thank you Dale. Some people dont deserve children.

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  14. Poor child. Some adults are crazy.

    https://trailbrooklane.blogspot.com/2018/11/chess-eyes.html

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  15. Dear Liz,

    I can't say I have much tolerance for either parent. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. They're as bad as each other, Dad for what he does and Mum for non caring.

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  16. Oh that last line tells so much... if just her mother could see.

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  17. She sounds like a tough cookie, which she must be, sandwiched between to unbending and cruel adults.

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    1. You're right, she has to stand up for herself if no-one else will.

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  18. I hope she bites him hard enough to take a chunk out!
    You've created a resilient character..in less than 100 words...bravo!

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  19. Thank you, Dawn, I'm sure she will, she's feisty!

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