15/11/2018

MEMORIAL - a story in one hundred words


MEMORIAL

I was fourteen, running away from my stepfather, ducked in here out of the rain and practically fell over Mike. He gave me one of his coats.
It was our home for months till they caught me shoplifting and put me in care, but then the social worker tried it on so I came back to Mike.
Five years we had before his cough turned worse. I got us into a shelter but it was too late.
The Social cremated him and gave me his ashes. That’s his grave there – the only dad I ever had worth the name.


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42 comments:

  1. I liked the minimalism of "his cough turned worse". We both saw a similar story in the prompt

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  2. And of course, how will he survive now without him? Touching story of friendship Liz.

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    1. You took me aback there, Iain, seeing my character as a boy, but I accept that it works with either gender.

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  3. Oh this was so heart wrenchingly sad. Beautifully done, Lizy.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thanks Susan - your story made me laugh!

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  4. So very sad. Even when things seem to get better, they can get worse.

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    1. I think she'll be lost without her 'dad'.

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  5. What a tragic life. Well portrayed.

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  6. A sorrowful story indeed. Hopefully this will be the turning point.

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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    1. It could be, depending on strength of character.

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  7. i could feel the raw emotions. great writing as usual.

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  8. I'm hoping the child is old enough to make in on their own now...

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    1. Nineteen, and a survivor - she should make it.

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  9. Really touching story. Hapless girl who had one good person in her life, he is also no more.

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  10. Very strongly conveyed, I enjoyed this

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  11. A tough life but with someone who cared for them for a while anyway. Very sad.

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  12. Hopefully the memory of him will sustain hwr.

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  13. Excellent, although very sad, piece of writing.

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  14. A great little tale, heart warming in many ways despite the sad ending.

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  15. Sad story, well crafted, Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.

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  16. A very sad tale. I guess at least she had MIke to care for her until she could care for herself. Well-done!

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  17. Such a devastating tale, but maybe five years with such a father makes all the difference.

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    1. It must have made some difference. She wanted to mark his grave.

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  18. Sad story. Really makes you think about the good and the bad people out there and how the lines are so blurry.

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    1. Thanks Dawn - I agree with you about the blurred lines.

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  19. Such a hard life it is for some. So sad.

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    1. Let's hope she rises above her bad start.

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  20. sad, but keeps happening, again and again

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  21. Dear Liz,

    Such a sad story. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS I'm looking forward to reading Wolf Pack.

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    1. Thanks Rochelle - I am looking forward to getting Wolf Pack in print!

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