14/06/2018

JILTED - a story in a hundred words


JILTED

See that dress on the line? That’s my dream in tatters.
I shouldn’t have fallen for Hank, of course, but there’s a shortage of single men round here, and when he breezed into the bar, all tan and drawl, I was smitten.

Out in the cornfield he kissed me till I melted like butter in the sun. He came to supper, spoke respectful to Pa, charmed Momma, talked about settling down hereabouts, and we set a date.

He didn’t show.

When the dress is dry I’ll put it away in tissue paper.
You never know – I might need it again.


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Yes, I know it's probably a bird, but I saw a dress blowing in the breeze. If you follow the Blue Frog link from https://rochellewisoff.com/  you will discover what other writers thought they saw.
Thanks to Jean L Hayes for the photograph and to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers, for whom I have written 100 word stories for at least four years - that's the equivalent of a novella!

Which brings me to the book I have actually written - A Volcanic Race - which is available on Amazon in print at the bargain price of £6.39 - or as an ebook. Click on the cover at the top of this page to follow the link to Amazon.

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33 comments:

  1. Sad story - but beautifully done. I loved the voice - very authentic - especially liked the phrase: all tan and drawl.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thanks Susan - I suspect I might be susceptible to the same !

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  2. Dear Liz,

    What was it about this photo that made us both see wedding? Yes, it is a bird, but then, it's all about what you see not what you look at. ;) Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Well, I could refer to that saying about great minds, but it's more likely to be the lace!

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  3. Something of saving your wedding clothes make me think of Miss Havisham ... but as long as there is no wedding cakes around I think she can hope for another.

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  4. Beautifully and wistfully written

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  5. What a cad! All he wanted was a kiss and a free supper!

    Click to read my FriFic tale

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  6. Somehow I don't think your heroine was devastated by her jilting. Better luck next time! I like the way you capture the matter-of-fact manner of your main character.

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    1. She's certainly looking forward. Thanks Penny.

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  7. I admire her resolve to look to the future.

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  8. http://www.seaviewwarrenpoint.wordpess.com14/06/2018, 20:57

    Loved this, Liz!

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  9. i love her positive spirit. a better man will come along for sure.

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    1. I hope so - and I hope next time she'll be more careful!

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  10. Wow, that was a unique take. And what great spirit of the girl!

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  11. I can see the dress on the line, gently moving in a breeze, then smell the fabric warmed by the sun. There's hope for this girl if she's willing to keep that dress.

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    1. Glad you can see it too, Alicia, and thanks.

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  12. ah, how sad. But at least she hasn't given up. I hope a truly good man comes her way, and she has joy in wearing the dress.

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    1. She is certainly open to that happening, which is preferable to being bitter and twisted.

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  13. Beware a man who is all tan and drawl. I like that you saw a dress. And I like the uplifting end. I hope the next one who melts her heart will be worthy of her. Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.

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    1. She didn't give herself time to get to know him - let's hope she's learned her lesson.

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  14. What a schmuck! Though...she was a bit quick on the wanting a date... which he should not have agreed to. Still.

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    1. Still. Such a small word that sums it up beautifully. She shouldn't have ... he shouldn't have ... but still.

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  15. Hank, you nasty fellow. He got his kiss and his supper and then moved on. Loved your last paragraph.

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