24/11/2016

CHAINS - a 90 word story

CHAINS

I was twelve when the trader threw my dead mother overboard and kept me for himself. 

He sold the beautiful babies I bore him, then took a younger girl to his bed and sold me to a rich businessman.

I cooked and cleaned for them, nursed their children, ate only their scraps. At night they locked me in the outhouse – on the back of that door I scratched every day of my years of slavery.

Until I was rescued I didn’t even know how to use a mobile phone.
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Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers on her blog  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/ from whence you can follow the link to read other stories prompted by CEAyr's photograph.

25 comments:

  1. Oh, such a big story in so few words. Another mini marvel from you, Liz!

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    1. Thank you Helen. I tried to find another ten words but it seemed right to leave it at 90!

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  2. Oh, such a big story in so few words. Another mini marvel from you, Liz!

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  3. Oh my goodness, I'm lost for words, Liz. Powerful stuff!

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    1. Thanks, Susan. That door have me the shivers so this story is what came out.

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  4. A very strong story. Poor woman.

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    1. Slavery hasn't been abolished yet. Thanks for commenting, Sandra.

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  5. Dear Lizzy,

    Powerful story. To imagine such a crime in the modern world. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle. The trouble is, such things are happening in the modern world.

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    1. Thanks for reading and commenting, Keith.

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  7. Unfortunately this is still true in too many places. Powerful story!

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  8. Nice ending to show how current this story is.

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    1. Thanks Dawn - I wondered who would pick up on that!

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  9. What a heartbreaking story, Liz. Dawn makes a great point. This tragedy doesn't stop. You captured it well.

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    1. Thanks Amy. I loved yours too.

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  10. This is so sad... stories like this seem to happen, but at least there might be a change... Hope she can get her children back as well.

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    1. That would be a happy ending indeed, but where would she start?

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  11. That ending was a shocking twist. Nice job.

    Arlee Bird
    Tossing It Out

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    1. Thanks Arlee - and welcome to my blog!

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  12. Oh what an ending! Very good - pulling the story into modern times makes your point so strongly.

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    1. Thanks Margirene - I am glad it worked.

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  13. Great story of white slavery for so few words, Liz. Good writing. ---- Suzanne

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    1. Thanks Susanne, though it's not always white - or white on black either. Many modern slaves are black serving black masters.

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