03/03/2016

DIAMONDS - a 100 word story

One advantage of writing flash fiction is that sometimes one can wake up with an idea, let it simmer while doing the weekly shop, and then write it in the time it takes to drink a coffee.
As I did this morning.
Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers on her blog  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
and to  Sean Fallon for the photograph that prompted this week's story. I hope you enjoy it - please leave a comment before moving on :)

DIAMONDS

Sango was terrified of the dark, but mining was the only employment available – he had no choice.

After a year of desperate saving he bought a head torch, which helped, but he was still afraid. Because his light found diamonds where others failed, the guards looked indulgently on the spare batteries he always carried.

Then one evening Sango endured the usual body search, left the mine, and kept on walking. Many days later, he removed the end of one battery and tipped its contents into a dealer’s hand.

He bought a plot of land with the proceeds and grew vegetables.
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29 comments:

  1. Brilliant Lizy - if you'll forgive the pun.
    Ann

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    1. Oh, very clever, Ann! and thank you.

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  2. I'm very impressed at such an unexpected interpretation of a potentially boring photo of a bottle of batteries! Well done, Lizy.

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    1. Thanks Susan, but batteries are so useful that it left the field wide open.

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  3. Great take on the prompt Liz. You certainly find unique angles to these prompts.

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    1. Thanks Sandra - I clearly hace a very twisted mind!

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  4. Oh, I LOVE this story. It's perfect. And if you wrote it into a longer story, and sold it to a movie company, you could retire. Seriously. It's totally brilliant!

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    1. Thank you Vijaya - I am retired already but the money would help!

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  5. Good story using the prompt!

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  6. Wonderful. The story unfolded beautifully to a most satisfying ending. I love it.

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    1. Thanks margirene - I wish my novel was as easy to write as this was!

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    1. I wonder how far back he was planning that - which came first, the batteries or the idea?

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  8. The last line made me smile.

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    1. I am happy to start your weekend off cheerfully, Dawn!

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  9. he was lucky not to get caught. he was wise to quit while he was still ahead. :)

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    1. You are right on both counts, plandel.

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  10. Dear Liz,

    Dare I say, an enlightening piece? Clever take on the prompt.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I'll let you get away with that as it's you!

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  11. I love it. Great idea, and hooray for Sango.

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    1. His patience and ingenuity were rewarded.

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  12. Your mind with its imagination worked overtime on that story, Liz. With your descriptions I could see it happening. Well done. :) --- Suzanne

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  13. Oh there are thieves I really love when they succeed..

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    1. So do I, and he used his loot wisely.

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  14. Hi, new follower here! :) I loved this, very well done indeed!

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    1. Hi WritingNut - welcome to the small, select band of my regular readers! I'm glad you liked the story, and hope you've scrolled back through some others?

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