26/03/2015

MISSING MAVIS - a 100 word story


Friday Fictioneers is the brainchild of Rochelle - go to her blog to follow the Blue Frog trail and read other writer's takes on the photograph below.  https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
The following story is what the picture prompted me to write.

MISSING MAVIS

David put his pint down half-finished. “Fetch your instruments, lads.”
“What – on a Sunday?”
“Just get them – I have a feeling.”
David’s intuition was seldom wrong so they knocked back their own drinks and trooped out to the park.

When the last note faded away into the night air they heard sobbing, and David found an elderly man sitting on a bench. “You all right, sir?”
“I courted Mavis by that bandstand.” The old man squared his shoulders and confessed, “I was going to the river until your music brought me to my senses. May I buy you a drink?”

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I have entered the lists for the April A-Z Challenge - to blog every day for a month (with Sundays off) using the letters of the alphabet as a guide. My chosen subject is Tenerife, with lots of photographs and my own, slightly skewed, point of view.
Please do pop in and leave a comment to encourage me to keep going!


37 comments:

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    1. Thank you Annalisa - it must be the influence of the music!

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  2. Aaaaw.

    Like the hint that this might not have been the first time the band caused someone to have second thoughts.

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    1. David is obviously psychic - or fey, or whatever the word is for that strange and elusive gift.

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  3. Yes, he may. I'll have a porter stout.

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  4. Sweet story, Lizy. And a great picture of a bandstand being used.

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    1. Thanks Carol - though I can't take credit for the picture!

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  5. Sometimes things do happen for a reason.

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    1. Thanks Keith - and thanks for commenting twice!

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  7. Nice story on acting on intuition...

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    1. Thanks ansumani - intuition can be a powerful force.

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    1. That's one for David and one for you?

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  9. A wonderful "accidental" meeting. Great pull on the heartstrings.

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    1. I must be getting soppy in my old age! Time to drag out a few horror stories.

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  10. Saved by the music! Lovely.

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    1. Thanks, Dale - I think they were probably playing Mavis's tune, don't you?

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  11. Dear Lizy, Wonderful, sentimental story and I'm sure this has played out at many local parks in the world. Good job! Nan

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    1. Thanks, Nan - I don't always do sentimental - perhaps it's the influence of two new granddaughters!

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  12. I'm glad they trusted David's intuition. Touching story, well told.

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  13. I'm curious, do you know what song they played? I'm thinking 'Some Enchanted Evening' or "Blue Moon". It sounds like something Mavis and her man would have danced to.

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    1. In fact I was thinking of that old music hall song 'Silver Threads Among the Gold', but your choices work just as well!

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  14. Oh I would say that was a great way to be saved... I would have guessed they played "cry me a river"

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    1. Hi Bjorn - you get this week's prize for the best guess!

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  15. Dear Liz,

    David's intuition was spot on. Sweet story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I was in a mellow mood this week. Strange how one's mood affects the writing.

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  16. Dear Lizzy,

    This was sad and sweet and happy all at once. You are a good writer. Thanks for sharing this.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. Thank you Doug - your words are music to my ears!

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    1. Thanks for yet another comment, Ros.

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    1. Thank you Tay - I presume that's a positive comment? :)

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