01/04/2020

TWEET - a story in less than a hundred words


TWEET

“Mum! Come quick!”
“What is it, dear?”
“I’ve just seen one – you said there weren’t any left!”
“Well, I haven’t seen one outside for so long I thought something had killed them all. Don’t stand so close to the window, dear, it might not be safe.”
“But it’s only looking at me, Mum.”
“That’s as maybe, but we’ve got better things to do. There are still some berries left on that bush – nobody picked them this year. Come on, let's fly!”

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Only 80 words this week in my story written in response to the image taken by Douglas MacIlroy and posted on Rochelle's blog.  https://rochellewisoff.com/

I hope you are all finding ways of surviving the lockdown, if you live in a country that has imposed it. We are keeping our distance from anyone we see while food shopping or visiting the medical centre, but exchanging many a cheery 'hello' with total strangers as well as friends. My village has set up a volunteer help group of which I am part, so we hope nobody in our community falls through the net of care.

Meanwhile I have started work on the fourth, and probably final, book in my Living Rock series, so if you haven't already read the first three, Covid-19 LockDown would be a good time to order them from Amazon.The links to all three are here:-
A Volcanic Race: a novel: Volume 1 (Living Rock): Amazon.co.uk: Liz Young: 9781979086578: Books
WOLF PACK (LIVING ROCK): Amazon.co.uk: LIZ YOUNG: 9781790375080: Books
LANDSLIDE: a LIVING ROCK book: Amazon.co.uk: LIZ YOUNG: 9798618061049: Books

Stay home, stay safe, stay well, everyone!

43 comments:

  1. Lovely PoV Liz. A lot of animals must wonder what is going on at the moment! Good luck with novel numver 4, the perfect time to start writing it!

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    1. Thanks Iain. It would be the perfect time if only I could concentrate!

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  2. The PoV is a perfect... it took me some time to understand who did the talking, but at least the wings made me see it.

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  3. Nice reversal at the end. Short and tweet.

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  4. I read to the end and realised I'd been wrong about who was talking and what they were talking about. Clever

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  5. Ah, you got me! Lovely little tale, Lizy.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  6. That's a dizzying last line that spins the story. Well played.

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  7. Wow! This twist actually had me going "Aaahhh!" out loud. Very clever. Didn't see it coming.

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  8. How clever! I really enjoyed your take on the prompt. :-)

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  9. Liz, I *love* how you flipped the script on this.

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  10. Awesome. Short story writing is the most fun.

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    1. Thank you, Susan. Short shorts are all I can concentrate on right now!

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  11. Dear Liz,

    I love the little misdirect in your short piece. We're on lockdown here, too.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  12. i guess a total lockdown is made of this. what a grim scenario.

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  13. Love that surprise twist!

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  14. Nope, we're still around... Love the different POV of this

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    1. It'll take more than this to knock us out.

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  15. Great twist! I had to read the story again immediately to enjoy the full benefit of the altered POV. Really nicely done!

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  16. Ha, I only realised it was the birds talking right at the end :-) They must be wondering what's going on. And likely not caring!

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    1. Mine are still expecting their daily feed - no change in my garden!

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  17. It took me a bit to realize this was from the bird's PoV :) Do you think they miss us ?

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    1. Probably not, although some have learned to rely on us feeding them so who knows?

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