23/01/2020

NUTS! a story in one hundred words.


NUTS!
Moira crept round the shops, hiding her bruises behind her hair. Derek had ordered macadamia nut ice-cream – where on earth did he imagine she’d find that?
After an increasingly frantic search she tracked some down in the deli, and finished her shopping. At home she added a few more nuts and made a curry – he liked it hot enough to sear his taste-buds.

When Derek collapsed, gasping for his Epipen, Moira slipped along the back lane to throw the tub in a skip before calling an ambulance.
It arrived far too late, of course, but that was hardly her fault.
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It's taken me 24 hours to think of a story for this domestic image taken by Na'ama Yehuda, so I hope you think it's up to scratch! If you would like to read how other writers interpreted it, follow the Frog link from Rochelle's blog https://rochellewisoff.com/

32 comments:

  1. I guess Derek had it coming to him.

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  2. I can't feel much sympathy for a man who beats his wife. Whatever in his own background drives the behaviour, he could identify it as wrong and seek treatment. Strong sentiment in your story, Liz.

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    1. I believe it's a powder thing, but there's no excuse.

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  3. But why would Derek order a nutty ice-cream if he had an allergy? Maybe it was a strange sort of suicide!

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  4. You made us sympathise with a murderer

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  5. At least he had what he ordered.

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    1. Perhaps I should get a job script writing?

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  7. I know we're not supposed to applaud Moira but too late! Way to go, Lady! Sorry (not sorry) Derek

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    1. The power of writing to change the reader's mind about morals!

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  8. Dear Liz,

    No tears for his loss.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. Ha, love the last line. None of it was her fault at all, just a tragic accident :-)

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  10. Justice served with a smile. I love it. Well done getting rid of the evidence as well.

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    1. She did well on the spur of the moment.

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  11. poor chap, he had gone nuts... i felt sorry for him, though.

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    1. I suppose even wife beaters deserve a little sympathy, though they.wont get any from me.

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  12. A clever woman, though shouldn't be cheering for her. It's extremely difficult to feel sorry for an abuser. Cleverly written!! :-)

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  13. Good one for Moira. So sad for Derek, not. :)

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    1. You're on the side of the majority, Susan 🙂

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  14. Stories that involve abusing one's wife always push my therapist button. I'm glad she finally found a way to rid herself of the brute. Hope she lives happily ever after.

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    1. I hope so too, despite the inescapab;e fact that she murdered him!

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  15. Although I feel he deserved it, perhaps it might have been better if she'd acted sooner and in a less drastic way. (Although having never been in such a situation, I admit that I've no idea how hard it is to take any action, nor how I might behave.)

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    1. My gut reaction is that I wouldn't put up with abuse, but I am fortunate never to have been in that position.

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  16. Not really a dish served cold...
    but he so deserved it.

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    1. Moira will have to hope she gets my commenters on her jury! If she is caught, of course!

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