20/04/2017

STILL LIFE - a story in 100 words

STILL  LIFE
The books, vase and shoes had adorned Helen’s desk for so long that they became known as ‘the still life’.
Even after her husband William died, as unobtrusively as he had lived, she met any suggestion to move them with an obstinacy that intrigued her children while also exasperating them, so after Helen’s own funeral they demolished the pile with almost indecent haste.

Pressed inside every indented section of the book Lily discovered a faded rose, Henry tipped a champagne cork from each shoe, and hidden inside the vase Georgina found a bundle of love-letters, all signed, Eternally yours, George.’
.............................................................................
All that weight had to be crushing a secret, didn't it? Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers on her blog  https://rochellewisoff.com/ and to Magaly Guerrero for her photograph of the lovely flamenco shoes.

If you enjoyed that story, check out a slightly longer one, also written to a visual prompt, and published on Friday on this site -  http://visualverse.org/submissions/minotaur/

24 comments:

  1. That will be hard to swallow for the children. Very likely she didn't divorce her husband because of them. Who really knows their parents? Great story.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. I sometimes wonder what mine will think when they go through my things!

      Delete
  2. Dear Liz,

    I'm sure this was quite a shock for the children, particularly Georgina. Very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. I hoped someone would pick up that small detail - thanks Rochelle!

      Delete
  3. Shocking indeed but still a pleasant one.

    ReplyDelete
  4. Cleverly done, Liz - loved it!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

    ReplyDelete
  5. I feel bad both for Helen and her children! Well written.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. I'm not sure why you feel bad for Helen, unless it's because she had to hide her real love?

      Delete
  6. I wonder, if right after the finding, Georgina hired an investigator to find out who this George was. I mean, she was obviously named after him. And if Georgina is the oldest, things get all the most complicated.

    I love when a story leaves thinking all these questions!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. You're like me, MAgaly - I'm another one who writes mental endings to other people's stories!

      Delete
  7. It's amazing the shock truths that people often uncover about their deceased loved-one after funerals. Some things are best buried with the person in question. You make me wonder how Georgina is going to react to George who might be her father! I wonder if he's still alive.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. hi Sarah - I'm glad my story made enough impact for you to wonder about George and his ?? daughter.

      Delete
  8. I wonder why she never shared…

    ReplyDelete
  9. Such a huge story hidden behind a 100 words raising more questions than revealed. Very nice!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thanks Dahlia - and it would probably make a good womag story one day!

      Delete

Leave a comment, please - I will reply to everyone.