27/08/2015

CLASS OUTING - a 100 word story

Once again it's been a whole week since I've posted on my blog, but packing and bureaucracy have taken precedence. All being well, we exchange contracts on the sale of our Tenerife apartment next week, so I may be absent for a while!

This week's photo was taken by Claire Fuller and used as a prompt for Friday Fictioneers by Rochelle
https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
Follow the Blue Frog trail from her blog to read what other writers thought when they saw this photograph.



CLASS OUTING

“Gather round!” Miss Fletcher ordered. “Now, what have we learned today about the Elders?”
Twelve young voices recited, “They had no respect for the Environment and almost destroyed the Earth.”
Miss Fletcher nodded. “The Lowlands could not sustain civilisation but, thanks to our government’s foresight, we Highlanders have this Centre with its greenhouses and animal breeding laboratories.”
“What’s in these lockers, Miss?”
“This is the Cryonics Area where we store higher life forms for the future.” 
She spun a handle and opened a door. 
“You must go inside to see it properly. No need to push, Susie – there’s room for everyone.”



36 comments:

  1. Oh-er - hope they've got their coats on. I reckon it's about to get chilly.

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    1. Sent a chill down your spine, I hope, Pats?

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  2. Oh no. They'll need more than coats.

    That place frightens me.

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  3. Something tells me the door is going to close behind them. Nice dialogue!

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    1. It is indeed, and thanks, Claire.

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    2. thanks Jenny - another young lady on my blog!

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  4. Dear Liz,

    A literally chilling end to this story. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Those lines of doors have given me the shivers ever since I watched Quatermas and the Pit as a child!

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    1. Having just ssen the news of 71 people suffocating in a freezer truck, my story takes on an even darker tinge.

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  6. Those library stack units always did give me the creeps. Now they give me even more creeps. Good luck with the move.

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    1. Is that what they are? Thanks Ros :)

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  7. Creepy (I would say chilling, but that's been overused!) story. Does Miss Fletcher work for the Centre gathering up unsuspecting Higher lifeforms for preservation? You'd think she would have a reputation by now! ;)

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  8. This story is excellent and very chilling!

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    1. Thanks PJ - hope it didn't keep you awake?

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  9. Very sinister, and very believable too. Well done. Good luck with your move and happy resettlement in England.

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    1. I've never liked rows of doors - even a hotel corridor gives me the heebeejeebees.

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  11. Uh-Oh! Guess Susie is one of those higher life forms. Well, at least she's going to live long!

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    1. Without making the choice volutarily.

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  12. MY Suzie was stuck Inside her "prison"! ;-)

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    1. I'll check yours out next! Thanks for visiting.

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  13. Yikes, I wasn't expecting that! Great interpretation of the photo, Lizy.

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    1. Glad it took you by surprise, Susan! It'a difficult to judge whether a surprise ending works when you, the writer, know what's going to happen.

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  14. That was a surprise. The whole class?? Well told, Lizy.

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    1. The whole class - dreadful, and how would they explain to twelve sets of parents?

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  15. That is a longer story waiting to be written, Lizy. Could be scary...

    Fingers crossed for a trouble-free move. :)

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    1. Thanks Carol - and as for a longer story, 100 words is my limit right now!

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  16. Oops hope for a proper revival works when the ocean has receded...

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    1. That was last week's picture, Bjorn! Thanks for visiting each week.

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  17. After hearing her brag about government foresight, I developed an instantaneous distrust of Miss Fletcher which proved to be justified. A very well written scene, Liz.

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    1. She was a tad too gushing, wasn't she! Thanks Russell.

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