25/09/2014

HARRY'S PLACE - Fiction in 100 words

HARRY’S PLACE


Bryony’s nose wrinkled when they entered the shabby café but Albert headed confidently for a table. The barman flicked a switch and the wall of empty bottles glowed suddenly with colour. Albert’s hand shook slightly as he touched one.


“Your Nan and I shared this on our Golden Wedding – we always came to Harry’s. Saved my life in France, Harry did – kept his hand on that hole in my chest till the medics came. I thought I was dying but he said we’d live to be ninety. He never made it, but I’ve come to his place tonight so he knows I did.”

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Thanks to http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/  for th photo that prompted this latest in a long line of 100 word stories. Floow the link on her blog to read some of the others from Friday Fictioneers,

31 comments:

  1. So much story in 100 words, well done!

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  2. What a beautiful legacy to Harry.. being saved like that makes all the difference, and then the bar can be as shabby as it wants

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  3. Lovely story, Lizy, filled with so much feeling and love,

    janet

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  4. WOW! In 100 words, you have woven quite the story and tugged at my emotions too! Beautifully done! :D

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  5. From those few words, a whole story is conjured.

    You are mistress of the powerfully succinct, Liz!

    Helen

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    1. Thanks Helen - let's hope people like my thousands of words when they go out into the big wide world!

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  6. Dear Liz,

    Touching and poignant. I really loved this.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle - old soldiers never forget.

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  7. A lovely story of loyalty. I hope Bryony learns something from it.

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    1. She probably will - she's come out with her Grandad, which is a good start!

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  8. Beautifully touching, Liz. A lot of story in the background in this one.

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    1. Thanks Annalisa - ievert story has a back-story, doesn't it?

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  9. That's such a nice touching story. Beautifully told.

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  10. What a beautiful heartfelt story and tribute, Lizy. LHN

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  11. Very touching story, liked the flow of the words so much.

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    1. Thank you for commenting snowlocked - you're new to my blog, so welcome!

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  12. I'm glad he made it. I could just see this happening. We still have a few old war vets around, though they are falling fast to old age and infirmities.

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    1. Russell - you're the only one who picked up on the veterans hint! I saw them both making it home from France, Harry opening his bar and albert being a regular until Harry didn't 'make it' to 90. But in 100 words one can't say all that!

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  13. what a very moving story. very beautiful.

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