03/04/2013

CORPORAL



CLOUDS covered Mount Teide went I went for my morning walk – not surprising after that wild windy night. I'm a tad weary today, too - when leaves the size of a man’s hand CLASH together they tend to wake me up! 











But I must stick with my blog theme – my novel Helter-Skelter, which I am re-writing this month alongside the A-Z challenge.

CORPORAL Albert Smith and the pitiful remains of his squad were heading for the coast, a scant hour ahead of the enemy, when Albie, from his seat in the cab beside Private Thompson, saw the helter-skelter. 
It was far off to the right, blackened and smoking rather than clean red and white stripes, but the truncated-cone shape was unmistakable. He clutched Thompson’s arm; “Tommy! Look at that – I don’t bloody believe it!”

 These are the opening lines of H-S. It is 1940, and the British Army is racing to reach Dunkirk before the Germans. Chapter two returns to 1925 and follows Albie growing up - I will give you more snippets of his story as we go along.

11 comments:

  1. Ah, see, I'm intrigued now. I want to know what he's talking about.

    Nice post.

    ~M~

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  2. Me too, why doesn't he believe...?
    But you have clouds! We have bright sunshine. Just mentioning it!

    Rosalind Adam is Writing in the Rain

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  3. I'm getting quite drawn into this already and it is a great way to introduce your book - in bite-size tasters. I can think of a young relative who will be looking forward to reading just such a tale.

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  4. I'm also intrigued. I'll be back to read more!

    Jenny at Choice City Native

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  5. So now I can count on four people to buy my book if - sorry, when - it makes it into print! Thank you all!

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  6. Definitely a thought provoker - maybe 5 book buyers now.

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  7. Intriguing excerpt! Interesting setting/time period for a story as well.

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  8. Hiya Lizy,

    I love reading your little snippets about your environment, eg the leaves that keep you awake. Plus the pics are great too.

    Best wishes for A-Zedding and sorry you can't follow me (I dunno what it is with that blogging site)

    Debbie W
    http://writingworkshopsandcompetitions.blogspot.co.uk


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  9. That's a great opening, Liz. I'm hooked. I still think you should self-publish while you wait for an agent.

    Glad you decided to take part in the challenge - good luck!

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  10. Great stuff! I'd self publish too. Good advice. Thanks for liking my A-Z writing challenge blog.

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