19/07/2018

ECLIPSE - a story in 100 words


ECLIPSE
“Fetch another virgin now!” the Chief screamed, “The Sun is dying!”
The medicine man cowered. “But Chief – we’ve sacrificed all the virgins.”
“Get Daxo’s neice.”
“The gods will be insulted – she’s too ugly.”
“That’s why I’m sure nobody’s screwed her.”
The fire that burned Daxo’s neice had been his fault - she was still a virgin because no man saw past the scars. 
“Hide, Petl – they will sacrifice you,” he urged.
“They won’t if I’m not a virgin, Tio.”
“Who?” Daxo gasped.
“You, Tio – quickly!”
Despite himself, Daxo succumbed, and the medicine man arrived just as Daxo saved Petl - and the sun - the only way he could.
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This week's story is condensed from another I wrote last year, with apologies for my lack of  fresh inspiration. We have just been offered a Trust cottage and will be moving within a month - so much to do, so little time, but we're thrilled.
Meanwhile, a quick plug for my latest book HELTER-SKELTER - just the job for a holiday read so be sure to get your copy, paperback or ebook, before you pack your suitcase. Link to the Amazon page at the top of my blog.

31 comments:

  1. I like this, but what an awful proposition, thank God we know enough science to keep us sane!

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    1. Not an easy choice for either of them.

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  2. Superstitions kill so many innocent people.
    Sun is a star and will change into another form one day.
    Certainly can't be appeased in any such way...
    - Anita

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    1. Sun worship was widespread, so an eclipse must have been terrifying

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  3. Well, that was disturbing on a lot of levels...

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    1. I should have included a warning, sorry.

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  4. Oh my goodness - that was a tough read!

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    1. Sometimes my imagination takes me to odd places.

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  5. Dear Liz,

    Poor Petl. A no win situation.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Se was a quick thinker - we have to give her that!

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  6. Brilliant quick thinking by Petl. What a way to convert a threat into an opportunity!

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    1. An opportunity? I wonder if she saw it like that.

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  7. Yikes. No more virgins in the whole village because they're all dead. That's something to think about.

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    1. There'll definitely be a shortage of available brides - perhaps Petl will find a husband after all?

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  8. it's rather unfair when guys aren't sacrificed. if they're virgins, they should be given the opportunity, too.

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    1. Quite right, but 'twas ever thus!

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  9. Why is it always young female virgins? I think it's time we throw a couple of young, handsome male virgins...
    I liked this!

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  10. Wow..that went by so fast!
    Good luck with the move.

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  11. Desperate times calling for desperate measures indeed.

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    1. Worth it if it saved her life - she'd been through enough already.

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  12. How come it was always female virgins who got sacrificed?

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