29/11/2017

INCOMERS - a story in one hundred words

INCOMERS

The farmhouse was just within their budget, so Beth and Steve bought it, reasoning they could do much of the renovation themselves.
The owner of the post-office-cum-stores said morosely. “Hear you’ve bought the old Arnold place. Hope you know what you’re doing.”
Back outside, Beth shivered. “What did he mean?”
“Villagers don’t like incomers getting a bargain,” Steve said, “They’ll come round when we offer them work.”

But no tradesman would enter the property and they had to do everything unaided. It was weeks before they started clearing the outhouses.
That was when they discovered the bloodstains in the bath.
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Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers, and 'What's His Name' for the photo prompt. I must also thank those people who have already bought a copy of my book A Volcanic Race - now is the time of year to buy gifts for friends and family, so why not a book? Positive reviews will encourage me in my present task of writing the next book in the series. It is available on Amazon in print and ebook. 


47 comments:

  1. Oh dear... not that I'm surprised. There had to be something nefarious about the place!

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    1. Yes - who leaves a perfectly good toilet in a shabby shed?

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  3. Ooh, chilling, creepy twist - well done!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thanks Susan. *wonders what she deleted*

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  4. Oh, yeah, not what I was expecting...how great!
    Scott
    Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/11/29/friday-fictioneers-a-memory-a-fear-glad-i-am-older/

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    1. What were you expecting, as a matter of interest?

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  5. Oh dear, will take more than a lick of paint to clean that sort of history away.

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    1. No doubt the post-master will give them all the gory details in time.

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  6. Dear Liz,

    I think they've gotten in over their heads with this fixer-upper. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Well, it is only bloodstains - a body would have been worse, and believe me, I was tempted!

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    2. I thought it was about time I did a bloodthirsty story!

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    3. I thought it was time I wrote a bloodthirsty story.

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  8. Good writing here, Liz.

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  9. That was a great twist in the intriguing tale.
    Congrats on the new book,Liz.
    I have a fairly long list now of 'want to read and buy books' written by some of the talented members of this lovely group.
    Best wishes...

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    1. Thanks Moon. If every member of FF bought a book I would be delighted!

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  10. Loved the ending Liz, though a body would have been much more fun, especially if it started moving as soon as they left the shed to report it :-)

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    1. Ahah! Another writer who writes their own endings :)

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  11. I wonder how fresh thse stains are.

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  12. Good twist. Very much in the spirit of Friday Fictioneers! Nicely constructed.

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    1. Thanks Penny. Are you suggesting we're all bloodthirsty?

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  13. Ugh! That made me shudder!

    Just wondering - Did 'post-office-cum-stores' count as one word?

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    1. Stains of any kind would make you shudder, Helen, and yes - hyphenated words count as one word.

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  14. I'm waiting with dread for the day they start digging up the garden...

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    1. Thanks Sandra - I may hang onto that thought for an appropriate prompt!

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    1. But where to if nobody will buy their half-completed renovation?

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  16. I think it's time to cut their losses and run...

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    1. That depends on the age of the bloodstains.

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  17. methinks, the authorities should get involve and unlock the mystery surrounding the place.

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    1. Which would mean me starting on a detective story!

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  18. Oh, yes! Creepiness in a small town. Well done!

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    1. Small towns seem to specialise in it, don't they!

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  19. Yeeks! There have been dark deeds afoot there once upon a time. I hope it's not haunted.

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    1. I think a ghost might be the least of their worries.

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  20. Who dunnit. What is the story the locals know that they don't? Are they going to freak and fly or stew and stay? You've written a creepy mystery Liz that I want lots of answers for the questions raised.

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    1. Perhaps I should write a serial!

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  21. A gruesome murder on the property. No wonder the villagers don't want to come there. They also might think the place is haunted. Or, perhaps the murderer was never captured. Good writing, Liz. All the best with your book. :) --- Suzanne

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  22. Oh wow....just wow!
    Good one, Liz.

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