16/11/2017

GANG WARFARE - a story in one hundred words




GANG  WARFARE

We never meant to hurt anyone.
Me, Ginge and Joey were the Denver Street Gang, with our headquarters in Joey’s garage. The four from Bennett Road used the old office building. It was only kids’ stuff – yelling insults, chucking stones, letting tyres down.

Then Ginge suggested it would be fun to smoke them out with that tin of sludge off the garage floor. How were we to know it would burn that fierce?

Three of them got out the back, but Kevin broke his ankle and couldn’t run, so they just left him.

They’ve got a nerve calling themselves a gang.
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Thanks to J Hardy Carroll for this week's Friday Fictioneers' photo prompt. to read other stories by our group of writers, visit https://rochellewisoff.com  and follow the links.
I have again been busy working on getting my first book published. The print version of A Volcanic Race went live on Amazon today and the ebook should follow shortly!! Once I've recovered from the excitement I can start revision work on the second book in the series.

44 comments:

  1. Well done on capturing such an authentic voice. Who hasn't done - or heard of - youngsters' pranks going wrong? But I hope Kevin escaped!


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    1. 'We didn't mean it' is the eternal cry of such kids, isn't it?

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  2. Interesting – the lack of conscience wrapped up in youth.

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    1. Well put, Helen, and thanks for commenting.

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  3. Unless he escapes, it's something they'll have to live for the rest of their lives. Nice one liz.

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    1. The guilt will creep up on them slowly as they mature.

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  4. Dear Liz,

    How quickly things can escalate. Well told. Love the voice.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. Well that was horrible. Maybe they should give up being a gang. One needless death is enough.

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    1. More than enough! Thanks for commenting, James - although I'm hoping you didn't mean my writing was horrible!

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  6. Never leave a man behind is surely the first rule of any gang. Poor Kevin.

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    1. Exactly - they have no right calling themselves a gang.

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  7. A clever idea of yours to have the narrator shift the responsibility onto the other boys for leaving their friend behind instead of saving him. Very typical of teenage boys, albeit usually with much less serious consequences.

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    1. Teenagers, boys and girls, will often try to slip out of the blame zone.

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  8. I loved his criticism of the other gang! Outrageous.

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    1. Outrageous is right. Thanks Sandra.

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  9. How were they to know? Indeed. Nice take on the prompt.

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    1. Thanks for visiting and commenting.

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  10. Ooh, Liz, that packed a punch!
    Convincing writing.
    Well done.

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  11. From prank to tragedy, we don't even realize how close to the edge we walk. Great story!

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    1. Well put, Lore, and thank you.

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  12. Yes, prank can turn tragic. He was quick to take himself out of the blame.

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    1. Much too quick - a future politician?

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  13. Great story. The voice sings!

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    1. It is, isn't it. Thanks for commenting.

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  15. Maybe Ginge and her crew rescued poor Kevin. I hope so.

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    1. Someone else who writes their own happey ending!

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  16. Great story. You could hear the remorse quickly change to it was their fault, as a true gang would have looked after their own.

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  17. How easy child plays can turn into disaster... i remember once when I set fire to a mailbox... I was never found out, and so happy that the house didn't catch fire..

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    1. Is this your first confession?

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  18. 'I didn't mean it' or 'It wasn't my fault' are the eternal refrains of youngsters caught out. Well captured.

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    1. Thank you Clare - I lost count of the number of times I heard those words from my own kids!

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  19. I don't doubt that similar things have really happened.

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  20. I could just picture this. Horrid friends that Kevin has. Hope he gets out and dumps their sorry arses

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    1. He probably crawled out, recovered, made his fortune and never spoke to them again. Will that do as a happy ending?

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  21. Heartrending story told from a child's viewpoint, Liz. Good writing. All the best with your books. :) --- Suzanne

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    1. Thank you and thank you, Suzanne.

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