28/09/2017

THE TEST - a story in one hundred words.

THE  TEST

Amita’s parents were modern enough to let her choose her own husband.
Sleek Ahmed had a large apartment above his shop, while Jamel was lean and sunburned from driving his lorry all day.
Undecided, Amita said she would marry whoever brought her the best gift.

Ahmed, freshly shaved, arrived first with a delicate gold necklace, promising to smother Amita in jewels when she married him.
She smiled noncommittally.
Finally Jamel’s lorry stopped outside and a huge sheet of corrugated iron clattered to the ground. “A new roof for your parents,” Jamel said, wiping sweat from his brow.

Amita chose him.
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Here we are again with stories for Friday Fictioneers, a forum hosted by https://rochellewisoff.com/ - you can follow the link from her blog to read other takes on the photo prompt for this week, which was taken by J Hardy Carroll.

36 comments:

  1. We all need a solid roof. Lovely, Lizy.

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    1. Thanks Helen - she chose well, I think.

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  2. A wise choice! A handyman around the house is far more sensible.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    1. I'd choose a practical man, especially one who is lean and brown!

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  3. She has a sensible head on her shoulders. The jewellery can come later.

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    1. I wouldn't be dazzled by jewellery either.

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  4. A practical gal.... sounds like the correct choice!

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    1. Perhaps she was also swayed by his looks?

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  5. Excellent choice. I would have chosen him, too :)

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  6. An updated fairytale where the 'princess' chooses the 'prince' through his nice line in corrugated iron! I love this. She's definitely made the right decision. Great writing Lizy

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    1. I hadn't thought of it like that, Lynn!

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  7. Dear Liz,

    If she has an ounce of intelligence, Jamel would be the practical choice. Lovely story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Jamel has the best heart, too.

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  8. If she'd married Ahmed he could have hired six men to fix the roof---but she's obviously getting the one who thinks of the needs of others. And her parents will love him. ☺

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    1. They will - I'd choose him as a son-in-law any day!

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  9. That's an easy choice.... assuming she is not materialistic, of course!

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  10. Wise move! Great take on the prompt.

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  11. Oh, yeah. That's a no-brainer. Good heart, that one.

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    1. Precisely, Marley - thanks for visiting.

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    1. We all seem to agree with her.

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  13. Lean, brown, and practical. A keeper.

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  14. Yes, sometimes you have to look who has the best sense... and money can buy anything but common sense.

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    1. Quite. Thanks for commenting, Bjorn.

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  15. Yay! The sensible guy wins out!

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  16. An obvious choice! Though she could have sold the jewelry to buy a new roof but then again, it's the thought that counts right? Great story Lizy :)

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    1. Anyone can buy jewellery - going to the trouble of aquiring a corrugated iron roof proves the kind of man he is.

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