15/05/2014

BREAKING POINT - 100 word story

Friday Fictioneers is a group of writers who write 100-word stories prompted by a photograph posted each week on Rochelle’s site
You can read all the other stories – free! – by following the link.

Here is this week's photo - and my story.



BREAKING POINT

Everything revolves around those bloody sheep – even Colin’s birth took second place to Brian’s prize ewe’s twins, and I ended up bottle-feeding Colin with one hand and a lamb with the other.

Shearing time means cooking for an army of sheep-shit-covered helpers, and after thirty years I’ve had it up to here. 

So I've left Brian a note, planning to be well gone before he gets home, but I get stuck behind this tanker. I'm halfway past it when the flock appears, Brian walking at his usual funereal pace, and I can see his lips forming the words – “Going out, Lambkin?”

22 comments:

  1. Oh, I feel her pain. You conveyed her situation immaculately. Well done.

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    1. Thanks Sandra - we've all felt relegated to second place on occasions, haven't we?

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  2. Aww... Lambkin. :) This is definitely not her day.

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    1. If he'd called me that for 30 years I'd run over his foot!

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  3. Ah looks like the life of Brian is getting all out of sheep-shape soon.

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  4. and I ended up bottle-feeding Colin with one hand and a lamb with the other.

    OH! This says it all . . . Good job

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    1. One of my best friends was married to a farmer. Enough said!

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  5. All's not wool in that relationship! (sorreee)

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    1. Cheers Patsy - I'll probably get a whole flock of groaners before the week's out.

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  6. Dear Lizy, Great story and comment from Patsy, above. Very well written, Liz. I feel sorry for her, but women sometimes (usually) take a back seat to Mr. Man's whims or dreams. I want them to have dreams, but I want a dream too. Hope she gets out and can lose the name "Lambkin." Nan :)

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    1. thanks Nan - and you're right about women's dreams taking a back seat. Too many parallels in my own likfe to list here!

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  7. Good story. Her husband may have to learn how to cook. Well done. : ) ---Susan

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  8. Dear Liz,

    I can see her frustration. Well depicted. Nicely done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle - frustrated enough to leave him after all those years!

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  9. That was perfect! I loved your story!

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    1. Music to my ears, Vijaya - thank you!

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  10. Great story and brilliantly written - lambkin was a clever touch. The man is clearly sheep-obsessed!

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    1. Thank you ELA - 'lambkin' popped into my head out of the blue, obviously my writing angel at work!

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  11. Oh my gosh, poor woman.
    Great story, Lizy. That last line is perfect.

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    1. Thanks Ruth! I hope she drove over his foot!

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