22/01/2014

PANCHO Friday Fiction 100 worder


PANCHO

The locals joked that Pancho was more goat than man when he vaulted down the terraces on his bamboo pole like a visiting god. His goats ate some of the crops but were tolerated because the male sired fine kids on the local flock.
One year Pancho also sired a child on the baker’s daughter.

Her father met him the following year and presented him with his child.
“Are you sure he’s mine?” Pancho asked and stroked its head.
Beneath his hand he felt horns budding and the child gazed at him with yellow slitted eyes.

It was his.

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Friday Fictioneers write 100 words stories prompted by a photo posted by Rochelle  http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/

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39 comments:

  1. I get the Rose Mary baby kind of feel her. Good story. Original.

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    1. Thanks SH - you're always one of the first to comment and I appreciate it!

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  2. Great story, Liz. If you follow my 'Brockberrow', on Wattpad, you will eventually come across Evangelina Wiccawillie, the Goatwoman, and find some similarities with Pancho!

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    1. Evangelina sounds interesting enough to forgive that shameless piece of publicity, Snail - I shall go and look after I've had my hair cut!

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  3. The kid will have plenty of nannies to help care for it ...

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  4. I hope he plans to help raise his "kid". Great story !

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    1. I suppose somebody had to say it! I avoided that pun by a hairs-breadth myself.

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  5. I hope he plans to help raise his "kid". Great story!

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  6. Are you sure this isn't a preview for a new comedy coming out in theaters this summer: "Pancho and the babe" maybe?

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    1. Comedy? And there was I imagining I'd written a supernatural tale. Oh well.

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  7. Well he was a horny old goat wasn't he? Good story.

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    1. My story is bring all the old chestnuts out of the woodwork, isn't it?

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  8. That last line was the kicker - well done!

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  9. Good story - he certainly made his mark in this part of the world. Thanks, Nan

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  10. Dear Liz,

    Those crazy kids. You've certainly put an ominous spin on this. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. That's very funny. But a bit spooky too. Nicely told.

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  12. I think this is the most unique interpretation of the photo prompt this week. Well done!

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    1. .My mind does tend to fly off at a tangent

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  13. I horned in to late for all the puns and jokes(or did I?), but found it amusing that your horror story has morphed into comic-tragedy. :-) Good job, Lizy!

    janet

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    1. Thanks Janet - no I think every pun and joke has been dine!

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  14. A baby part goat would be something for an Excorcist to deal with.. great color with the pole-vaulting ...

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    1. Many locals in La Gomera actually do move aroun their terraces that way.

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    1. I suppose he could have tried blaming the billy goat!

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  16. Ha!ha!A real "kid" in the making ;-)Great take,loved it!

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  17. Brilliant and creepy story! I'm going to resist the temptation to make a 'kid' joke. They've all been said anyway!

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    1. You're right - they have! Thanks for stopping by.

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  18. Another great short. Well done!

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  19. Ooh! Great way to pack a punch into 100 words!!

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    1. Thank you Annalisa - 100 words are in some ways easier than 200!

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